Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. v. 4
It is the fact that sciencific research plays a very important role in the thriving of a nation. According to many opinions, instead of being conducted by private companies, essential scientific experiments must be run and administered by the governments. While there are some arguments in favour of scientific research by corporations, I am personally convinced that it should be the state officials to monitor the research but at the same time some private organizations can participate in these to push the progress. To begin with, I subscribe to the viewpoint that the governments are responsible for the implementing and managing research related to science. Firstly, the government is capable of providing financial assistance to various projects. In addition to, the government has the subsidy to cope up with the losses incurred if there has a search failure. Secondly, when government funds research activities, there is supreme security. They do not divulge any information which could weigh down national security. For example, there are a lot of pharmaceutical businesses exchanges the ingredients of medicines to some of them cheaper, which might take a negatively great influence to the patients. Nevertheless, I think that private companies should also share the responsibility to conduct scientific research. The reason is that this could help to ease the pressure on government’s budget. As a result, citizens would have to pay lower taxes, and the authorities would also have more currency to spend on other important fields such as education or healthcare. To conclude, I believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by both the governments and private companies because there are advantages from each of them. The state would help to ensure the safety of these experiments and the corporations would be able to contribute their parts to the well-being of the civilization.
It is the fact that
Possible spelling mistake found.
sciencific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
plays a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in the thriving of a nation. According to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
opinions,
instead
of
being conducted
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, essential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
experiments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be run
and administered by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
. While there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
arguments in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
by corporations, I am
personally
convinced that it should be the state officials to monitor the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
at the same time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
organizations can participate in these to push the progress.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, I subscribe to the viewpoint that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
are responsible for the implementing and managing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
related to science.
Firstly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is capable of providing financial assistance to various projects.
In addition
to, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has the subsidy to cope up with the losses incurred if there has a search failure.
Secondly
, when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
funds
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
activities, there is supreme security. They do not divulge any information which could weigh down national security.
For example
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
pharmaceutical businesses exchanges the ingredients of medicines to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of them cheaper, which might take a
negatively
great influence to the patients.

Nevertheless
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
should
also
share the responsibility to conduct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
. The reason is that this could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
the pressure on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government’s
budget.
As a result
, citizens would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay lower taxes, and the authorities would
also
have more currency to spend on other
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
fields such as education or healthcare.

To conclude
, I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
should
be carried
out and controlled by both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there are advantages from each of them. The state would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to ensure the safety of these experiments and the corporations would be able to contribute their parts to the well-being of the civilization.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts