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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. v. 3
Scientific research is necessary for the development of human. Some people believe that it should be conducted and monitored by the governments instead of private organizations. This essay disagrees with the claim for two main reasons: governments lack manpower to carry out various types of scientific research and governments are not financially capable of investing equal amounts of resources in each single matter either. Governments that want to do and control scientific research themselves must acquire a large enough number of qualified scientists to carry out researches on tons of different topics, which is unrealistic and impossible. Meanwhile, at other private companies, scientists are hired to only focus on researching and making new discoveries about certain matters. For instance, Novo Nordisk from Switzerland is a private scientific company that concentrates on diabetes type 2 and haemophilia research, and has successfully helped treat more than 20 million patients around the world, which shows the pivotal role of private institutions in scientific research. On top of that, scientific research is costly and longitudinal, thus, requires huge investments; governments are unable to finance all scientific research projects because there are many more matters they have to deal with. A new drug development may take up to 30 years and millions of dollars while governments have limited resources, mainly derived from national taxes for different purposes: education, health care, infrastructure etc. In contrast, private institutions can raise funds for a particular matter more easily with private investors and stock holders. For example, Oxford Vacmedix was able to close a 12-million series A funding solely for cancer vaccine research. Substantial funding for such a specific matter cannot be obtained from governments. It is, in the end, reasonable to conclude that governments should not have the total execution and control of scientific research and private firms’ participation is necessary
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research
is necessary for the development of human.
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Some
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people
believe that it should
be conducted
and monitored by the
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governments
instead
of
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private
organizations. This essay disagrees with the claim for two main reasons:
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governments
lack manpower to carry out various types of
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scientific
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research
and
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governments
are not
financially
capable of investing equal amounts of resources in each single
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matter
either.

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Governments
that want to do and control
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scientific
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research
themselves
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must
acquire a large
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enough
number of qualified scientists to carry out
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researches
on tons of
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different
topics, which is unrealistic and impossible. Meanwhile, at other
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private
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companies
, scientists
are hired
to
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only
focus on researching and making new discoveries about certain
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matters
.
For instance
,
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Novo
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Nordisk
from Switzerland is a
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private
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scientific
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company
that concentrates on diabetes type 2 and
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haemophilia
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research
, and has
successfully
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helped
treat more than 20 million patients around the world, which
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shows
the pivotal role of
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private
institutions in
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scientific
research.

On top of that
,
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scientific
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research
is costly and longitudinal,
thus
, requires huge investments;
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governments
are unable to finance all
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scientific
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research
projects
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because
there are
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many
more
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matters
they
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have to
deal with. A new drug development may take up to 30 years and millions of dollars while
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governments
have limited resources,
mainly
derived from national taxes for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
purposes: education, health care, infrastructure etc.
In contrast
,
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private
institutions can raise funds for a particular
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matter
more
easily
with
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private
investors and stock holders.
For example
, Oxford
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Vacmedix
was able to close a 12-million series A funding
solely
for cancer vaccine
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research
. Substantial funding for such a specific
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matter
cannot
be obtained
from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
.

It is, in the
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end
, reasonable
to conclude
that
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governments
should not have the total execution and control of
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scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
and
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private
firms’ participation is necessary
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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