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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.10

Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. v. 10
It is often claimed that having more money to spend is better than having free time or vice versa. Each group, which have different opinions, finds wealth or time to be more valuable than the other depending on their preferences. Some advocate that salary should be considered more important than having more free time. To begin with, by spending most of their time to acquire better incomes most of these people will feel relieved of any economic pressure. Taxes, food, transport and many other goods and services require one to spend most of their salary in order to be fulfilled. However, this could come alongside having tight schedules which might cause stress and a feeling of overwhelm due to the reduced amount of free hours through the day. On the contrary, it could be argued that time is the most valuable resource society has. Many are convinced that having extra time to spend leads to a better and healthier life. Although it is clear that by choosing time over money some benefits might become inaccessible, one can spend most of those spare hours with family, learning new abilities or relaxing after a long day. For instance, while being unemployed J. K. Rowling spent most of her free time writing her famous Harry Potter saga which not only helped her improve her writing but later became a worldwide success. This supports the idea that a well managed free time can improve one’s life. All in all, cash and time are essential to keep a balanced life. Money implies time and effort, and time is worth money, which means both of them go together. It is important to have money to fulfil daily needs while keeping enough spare time to spend without overlooking the other aspects of life.
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to
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spend
is better than
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having
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free
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time
or vice versa. Each group, which have
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different
opinions, finds wealth or
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time
to be more valuable than the other depending on their preferences.

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advocate that salary should
be considered
more
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important
than
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having
more
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free
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time
. To
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begin
with, by spending most of their
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time
to acquire better incomes most of these
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people
will feel relieved of any economic pressure. Taxes, food, transport and
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many
other
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goods
and services require one to
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spend
most of their salary in order to
be fulfilled
.
However
, this could
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come
alongside
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having
tight schedules which might cause
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stress
and a feeling of overwhelm due to the
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reduced
amount of
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free
hours through the day.

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, it could
be argued
that
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time
is the most valuable resource society has.
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are convinced
that
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having
extra
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time
to
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spend
leads to a better and healthier life. Although it is
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clear
that by choosing
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time
over
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money
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some
benefits might become inaccessible, one can
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spend
most of those spare hours with family, learning new abilities or relaxing after a long day.
For instance
, while
being unemployed
J. K. Rowling spent most of her
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free
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time
writing her
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famous
Harry Potter saga which not
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only
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helped
her
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improve
her writing
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but
later became a worldwide success. This supports the
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idea
that a well managed
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free
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time
can
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improve
one’s life.

All in all, cash and
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time
are essential to
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keep
a balanced life.
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implies
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time
and effort, and
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time
is worth
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money
, which means both of them go together. It is
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important
to have
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money
to fulfil daily needs while keeping
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enough
spare
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time
to
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spend
without overlooking the other aspects of life.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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