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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.51

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 51
In this competitive world that we have to work more hours to achieve our goals, some peoples claim that it is better to get along with difficult situations and try to accept them. Having said that, some people are against this idea and say that we should try to enhance our awkward situation. In my opinion, I suppose we should always seek for better fortune. On the one hand, it is important to be humble and try to accept what we have attained from our hard work. It is kind of a cognitive relaxation if you accept your pros and cons and not be jealous of your peers. Furthermore, if you always try to get higher pay you miss the real point of a life like being with your family or visit your close family more often. So if you want to be realistic you cannot be idealistic all the time and sometimes you have to give something to achieve something more precious. On the other hand, even though we should accept our assets and feel satisfied with them, we should not take it wrong with laziness and being aimless. Furthermore, we all are responsible for ourselves to use our abilities and our time in the right way. For instance, if we accept our inferior position by saying that it is our destiny and we cannot do anything about it, it is a great damage to ourselves. So, we must not take it wrong and try to be lazy it is not a reasonable excuse. In conclusion, however, it is an important goal that we constantly make effort for a greater situation, we should not be fanatic about it and we should consider both our physical and psychic abilities.
In this competitive world that we
have to
work more hours to achieve our goals,
some
peoples claim that it is better to
get
along with difficult situations and try to
accept
them. Having said that,
some
people
are against this
idea
and say that we should try to enhance our awkward situation. In my opinion, I suppose we should always seek for better fortune.

On the one hand, it is
important
to be humble and try to
accept
what we have attained from our
hard
work. It is
kind of a
cognitive relaxation if you
accept
your pros and cons and not be jealous of your peers.
Furthermore
, if you always try to
get
higher pay you miss the real point of a life like being with your family or visit your close family more
often
.
So
if you want to be realistic you cannot be idealistic all the time and
sometimes
you
have to
give something to achieve something more precious.

On the other hand
,
even though
we should
accept
our assets and feel satisfied with them, we should not take it
wrong
with laziness and being aimless.
Furthermore
, we all are responsible for ourselves to
use
our abilities and our time in the right way.
For instance
, if we
accept
our inferior position by saying that it is our
destiny and
we cannot do anything about it, it is
a great damage
to ourselves.
So
, we
must
not take it
wrong
and try to be lazy it is not a reasonable excuse.

In conclusion
,
however
, it is an
important
goal that we
constantly
make
effort for a greater situation, we should not be fanatic about
it and
we should consider both our physical and psychic abilities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 51

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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