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Scientific research is carried out and controlled by the governments rather than the private companiesDo you agree or disagree? v.1

Scientific research is carried out and controlled by the governments rather than the private companies v. 1
Higher education is known for its numerous advantages. It is argued that universities should only accept young students with the highest academic performance at school; however, from my own point of view, people of all ages should be accepted at universities despite their marks at school. This essay will examine both sides of the issue. It is claimed that offering places in universities to only youngsters with the highest grades is better than accepting everyone. There is no doubt that higher educational institutes care about their reputation, therefore, they might only accept superior students, who will be able to study hard, and, consequently, gain more skills compared to students with low grades. Not only does this affect the university’s prestige, but it also guarantees that the student is not overloaded. If students with low educational standards enrol in a relatively difficult college, it will end up with failing the courses, so choosing students based on their grades might save them from failing. Even though these reasons might be convincing, it might sound unfair to some people. Quite on the contrary, it is believed that students should all be given the same opportunities in spite of their age and school performance. The first advantage of accepting people of all ages is giving them another chance to continue their education. For instance, something might have prevented them from studying at a university when they were young, so offering them places in universities will help them gain the needed skills to improve their career prospects. A further benefit is avoiding the unfairness of classifying people according to their performance at school. Based on my own experience, school is not always fair. Some students; for example, might have not received the same quality of education as other, which means that they have not been given the opportunity to excel at school due to having poor teachers. To conclude, offering places in universities for only those who achieved high marks at young ages should be stopped and equal chances should be given to everyone. This will allow all graduates to continue their higher education, which will improve the society in the future due to higher employment rate.
Higher
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education
is known
for its numerous advantages. It
is argued
that
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universities
should
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only
accept young
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students
with the highest academic performance at
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school
;
however
, from my
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own
point of view,
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people
of all
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ages
should be
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accepted
at
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universities
despite their marks at
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school
. This essay will examine both sides of the issue.

It
is claimed
that offering places in
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universities
to
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only
youngsters with the highest grades is better than accepting everyone. There is no doubt that higher educational institutes care about their reputation,
therefore
, they
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might
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only
accept superior
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students
, who will be able to study
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hard
, and,
consequently
, gain more
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skills
compared to
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students
with low grades. Not
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only
does this affect the
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university’s
prestige,
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but
it
also
guarantees that the
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student
is not overloaded. If
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students
with low educational standards enrol in a
relatively
difficult college, it will
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end
up with failing the courses,
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so
choosing
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students
based on their grades
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might
save them from failing.
Even though
these reasons
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might
be convincing, it
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might
sound unfair to
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some
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people
.

Quite
on the contrary
, it
is believed
that
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students
should all be
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given
the same opportunities
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in spite of
their
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age
and
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school
performance. The
first
advantage of accepting
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people
of all
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ages
is giving them another chance to continue their
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education
.
For instance
, something
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might
have
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prevented
them from studying at a
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university
when they were young,
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so
offering them places in
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universities
will
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help
them gain the needed
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skills
to
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improve
their career prospects. A
further
benefit is avoiding the unfairness of classifying
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people
according to their performance at
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school
. Based on my
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own
experience,
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school
is not always
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fair
.
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Some
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students
;
for example
,
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might
have not received the same quality of
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education
as other, which means that they have not been
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given
the opportunity to excel at
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school
due to having poor teachers.

To conclude
, offering places in
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universities
for
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only
those who achieved high marks at young
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ages
should be
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stopped
and equal chances should be
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given
to everyone. This will
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allow
all graduates to continue their higher
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education
, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the society in the future due to higher employment rate.
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IELTS essay Scientific research is carried out and controlled by the governments rather than the private companies v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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