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Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the importance of visual elements in painting. v.1

Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the importance of visual elements in painting. v. 1
Traditional marriage has been the bonding between two people, which helps both the people to stay together. There have been both pros and cons in marrying early and it is also dependent on the perspectives of individual people and may vary across different individuals and within people from different socio-cultural backgrounds. On one hand, early marriage is considered good in some societies in different rural regions across the world. For instance, early wedding such as in cases of child matrimony, is considered religious in a lot of rural areas and among different tribes and castes in India. In addition, families in these rural villages have given more importance to the wedding of their children at an early age when compared to providing proper education for their children; since due to limited Government funds, the families cannot help their children in getting educated to a university level degree. On the contrary, due to early matrimony in different societies, it hinders the scope and opportunities to study further for a child. Furthermore, there are also cases where young people fall in infatuation instead of true love and thereafter the couple generally absconds their hometown and settle in another city. Although, there are some instances where the affection may have been true between two people, but due to financial problems; the relationship graph and love may get troublesome and move downwards from the summit, which was prevalent before marriage. Hence, couples can marry at a very early age, but it is cumbersome and problematic when people are young due to less financial stability and less savings from a job or other sources of income. To conclude, I strongly believe that though people fall in love quite fast, but the decline in the relationship can be faster due to financial problems and less stability in life. Moreover, in some rural societies, early wedding is still prevalent, but in the longer duration the education gets hampered and henceforth, higher probability for people falling down the poverty line in the society.
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, which
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helps
both the
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to stay together. There have been both pros and cons in marrying
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early
and it is
also
dependent on the perspectives of individual
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people
and may vary across
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different
individuals and within
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people
from
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different
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socio-cultural
backgrounds.

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early
marriage
is considered
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good
in
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some
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societies
in
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different
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rural
regions across the world.
For instance
,
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early
wedding such as in cases of child matrimony,
is considered
religious in
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a lot of
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rural
areas and among
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different
tribes and castes in India.
In addition
, families in these
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rural
villages have
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given
more importance to the wedding of their children at an
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early
age when compared to providing proper education for their children; since
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due
to limited
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Government
funds, the families cannot
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help
their children in getting educated to a university level degree.

On the contrary
,
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due
to
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early
matrimony in
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different
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societies
, it hinders the scope and opportunities to study
further
for a child.
Furthermore
, there are
also
cases where young
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people
fall in infatuation
instead
of true
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love
and thereafter the couple
generally
absconds their hometown and settle in another city. Although, there are
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some
instances where the affection may have been true between two
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people
,
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but
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due
to financial problems; the relationship graph and
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love
may
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get
troublesome and
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move
downwards from the summit, which was prevalent
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before
marriage.
Hence
, couples can marry at a
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very
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early
age,
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but
it is cumbersome and problematic when
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people
are young
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due
to less financial stability and
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less
savings from a job or other sources of income.

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, I
strongly
believe that though
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people
fall in
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love
quite
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fast
,
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but
the decline in the relationship can be faster
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due
to financial problems and less stability in life.
Moreover
, in
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some
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rural
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societies
,
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early
wedding is
still
prevalent,
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but
in the longer duration the education
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gets
hampered and henceforth, higher probability for
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people
falling down the poverty line in the
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society
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the importance of visual elements in painting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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