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"Science and technology has made people's life easy. " Do you agree or disagree? v.1

"Science and technology has made people's life easy. " v. 1
In the modern world, science has played an important role in our lives. We can see the wonders of technology all around us everyday and we use them in order to make our day better. There is no denying the fact that Science and technology have made our life easier and this essay will discuss about the same. In the past, travelling from one place to another took days or even weeks, but after the invention of Trains, Buses, we can reach to our destination within hours. These inventions not only helped us in travel but also brought employment and became the source of income for many people. Apart from that, the most important invention of technology is the Internet. The Internet has now become an important aspect of our lives. For instance, we used to wait for weeks in order to know the welfare of our dear ones and now we can simply email them in seconds. The technology is advancing day by day, as a result of which we are able to see more and more inventions everyday. We are living in the world of robots and artificial intelligence and we can see both in most of the machines now. For example, Tesla motors, a world famous car manufacturer, build auto driver electric cars. We don't need a driver in order to drive that car. We can now order food online and pay for the same online. In conclusion, science has improved our way of living and help us in everyday tasks. The advancement in technology not only creates new products but also gives employment to a large number of people. We are using machines for almost all things and thus it concludes that science and technology has made our lives easier.
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has played an
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role in our
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the wonders of
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all around us
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everyday and
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our day better. There is no denying the fact that
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and
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technology
have made our life easier and this essay will
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same.

In the past, travelling from one place to another took days or even weeks,
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after the invention of Trains, Buses, we can reach to our destination within hours. These inventions not
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only
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helped
us in travel
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many
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people
. Apart from that, the most
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important
invention of
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technology
is the Internet. The Internet has
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now
become an
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important
aspect of our
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lives
.
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, we
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used
to wait for weeks in
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order
to know the welfare of our dear ones and
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now
we can
simply
email them in seconds.

The
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technology
is advancing day by day,
as a result
of which we are able to
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see
more and more inventions
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everyday
. We are living in the world of robots and artificial
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intelligence and
we can
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see
both in most of the machines
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now
.
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, Tesla motors, a world
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famous
car manufacturer, build auto driver electric cars. We don't need a driver in
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order
to drive that car. We can
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now
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order
food online and pay for the same online.

In conclusion
,
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science
has
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improved
our way of living and
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help
us in everyday tasks. The advancement in
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technology
not
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only
creates new products
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but
also
gives employment to
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people
. We are using machines for almost all things and
thus
it concludes that
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science
and
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has made our
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lives
easier.
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IELTS essay "Science and technology has made people's life easy. " v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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