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schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far do you agree with this statement. support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v.1

schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v. 1
It is commonly observed by some that most of the populace is unable to talk or deliver their messages well in the general place. There has been a thought that the teaching should begin from the school. In my opinion, it is significant to express our thinking appropriately in the community because to avoid misunderstanding and I agree that it has to be educated from the schoolings itself. To begin with, speaking clearly in the society will reduce the misinterpretation of the messages delivered by the speaker. In other words, if the speech is not understandable by the listener or not clear it may lead to interpret the information in a wrong way to others. As a result, it will ruin the image of the orator. For example, in most of the countries, while doing election campaign, political parties are delivering their speech to get votes, but most of the messages were spread wrongly to the public because of not in an organised manner. Thus, it has to be clear and concise while talking in social places to avoid the misunderstanding of the theme. Admittedly, learning of oratorical skill ought to be start of school to avoid stage fear and clear speech. That is to say that when children have the confidence to talk clearly with their peers, they can present their ideas well in the society without any discomfort in the future. Also, it will aid them to focus more on their thoughts to narrate it clearly during their presentation. For instance, the group discussions conducted by the companies during recruiting their employee states that people who got training from their school speaks well than others. Therefore, it helps to get better job opportunities when they learn the skill from school by reducing their fear. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree that it is more important to speak clearly in public to avoid the transformation of information in an incorrect way and I believe that it has to be taught from school to minimise the arena dread.
It is
commonly
observed by
some
that most of the populace is unable to talk or deliver their messages well in the general place. There has been a
thought
that the teaching should
begin
from the
school
. In my opinion, it is significant to express our thinking
appropriately
in the community
because
to
avoid
misunderstanding and I
agree
that it
has to
be educated
from the
schoolings
itself.

To
begin
with, speaking
clearly
in the society will
reduce
the misinterpretation of the messages delivered by the speaker.
In other words
, if the speech is not understandable by the listener or not
clear
it may lead to interpret the information in a
wrong
way to others.
As a result
, it will ruin the image of the orator.
For example
, in most of the countries, while doing election campaign, political parties are delivering their speech to
get
votes,
but
most of the messages
were spread
wrongly
to the public
because
of not
in an organised manner
.
Thus
, it
has to
be
clear
and concise while talking in social places to
avoid
the misunderstanding of the theme.

Admittedly
, learning of oratorical
skill
ought to be
start
of
school
to
avoid
stage fear and
clear
speech.
That is
to say that when children have the confidence to talk
clearly
with their peers, they can present their
ideas
well in the society without any discomfort in the future.
Also
, it will aid them to focus more on their thoughts to narrate it
clearly
during their presentation.
For instance
, the group discussions conducted by the
companies
during recruiting their employee states that
people
who
got
training from their
school
speaks
well
than others.
Therefore
, it
helps
to
get
better job opportunities when they learn the
skill
from
school
by reducing their fear.

In conclusion
, I
wholeheartedly
agree
that it is more
important
to speak
clearly
in public to
avoid
the transformation of information
in an incorrect way
and I believe that it
has to
be taught
from
school
to
minimise
the arena dread.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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