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schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far do you agree with this statement. support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v.2

schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v. 2
In this day and age school used to prepare students for university and teach skills to them for work. Although purpose of Schools just considered as a way to university, but I disagree with this idea because there are technical schools with practical training to send students for labor-market too. For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss advantages of this kind of schools. To begin whit, there are various reason that I support this kind of technical and professional schools. First and foremost, instantly after graduation, students could get a job, at least 4 years sooner than a graduated from university; Also, in this period of time, they could become the master in their profession. In my personal experience, when I started my first job as a building mapper, I was just 17 years old. Secondly, to get an education degree, the student has to pass a term in real space of job related with their field of study andThey could gain very useful experiences in this term. While in the university, dedicated time for practical lessons is less than theoretical and academic lessons. For example, a recent scientific research conducted with Tehran University researchers shown that achievement in job for those who studied in practical-schools is Far than the educated people of the university. In conclusion, there are several compelling reasons with advantages of preparation for work by schools. my personal sentiment is that by studying in practical-schools, people can save the further time of their life and learn arts and technics in young age to reach to a good job position.
In this day and age school
used
to prepare
students
for
university
and teach
skills
to them for work. Although purpose
of


Schools
just
considered as a way to
university
,
but
I disagree with this
idea
because
there are technical schools with practical training to
send
students
for labor-market too.

For the purpose of this essay, I would discuss advantages of this kind of schools.

To
begin
whit, there are various reason that I support this kind of technical and professional schools.

First
and foremost,
instantly
after graduation,
students
could
get
a
job
, at least 4 years sooner than a graduated from university;

Also
, in this period of time, they could become the master in their profession.

In my personal experience, when I
started
my
first
job
as a building mapper, I was
just
17 years
old
.

Secondly
, to
get
an education degree, the
student
has to
pass a term in real space of
job
related with their field of study
andThey
could gain
very
useful experiences in this term. While in the
university
, dedicated time for practical lessons is less than theoretical and academic lessons.

For example
,
a recent scientific research
conducted with Tehran
University
researchers shown that achievement in
job
for those who studied in practical-schools is

Far
than the educated
people
of the university.

In conclusion
, there are several compelling reasons with advantages of preparation for work by schools.
my
personal sentiment is that by studying in practical-schools,
people
can save the
further
time of their life and learn arts and
technics
in young age to reach to a
good
job
position.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay schools should prepare students for university rather than work. how far support your point of view with reason /or example from your own experience or observations. v. 2

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
265 words
5.5
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