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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.1

Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. v. 1
It is true that some people complain that children should not be forced to learn a foreign language in school. The schooling sistem could be reviewed to give more space to other activities. Despite the fact that there are are other moments in which they can learn this skill, I claim this teaching should be kept. On the one hand is commonly thought that schools give non-priority lessons which could be replaced by others, and language classes are one of these. Kids nowadays are not taught anymore everyday jobs such as cleaning or cooking, because there is no time to do this at school. Indeed, removing a foreign language from the timetable would leave space for other teachings. Also, this does not imply not to teach languages at all, but just post-dating to their adulthood. On the other side kids are quick learner and learning to communicate is very important. As a matter of fact, before the 10 years children are very open minded and can memorize a lot more than an adult would. It also needs to be noticed that not everybody can afford to pay someone to teach their son after school, nor everybody would like to. Furthermore, languages are not only important for cultural aspects, but also because they can allow to move around the world and start a better career. As an example it would be impossible for an Italian to get a job in the United Kingdom without a good knowledge of English. In conclusion, people claim that the teaching of languages should not be compulsory in schools, but I believe that is not only important, but also necessary.
It is true that
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some
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people
complain that children should not
be forced
to learn a foreign
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language
in
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school
. The schooling
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sistem
could
be reviewed
to give more space to
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other
activities. Despite the fact that there
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are are
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other
moments in which they can learn this
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skill
, I claim this teaching should be
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kept
.

On the one hand is
commonly
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thought
that
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schools
give non-priority lessons which could
be replaced
by others, and
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language
classes are one of these. Kids nowadays are not taught
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anymore
everyday jobs such as cleaning or cooking,
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because
there is no time to do this at
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school
.
Indeed
, removing a foreign
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language
from the timetable would
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leave
space for
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other
teachings.
Also
, this does
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not imply not
to teach
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languages
at all,
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but
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just
post-dating to their adulthood.

On the
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other
side kids are quick learner and learning to communicate is
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very
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important
. As a matter of fact,
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before
the 10 years children are
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very
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
open minded
and can memorize a lot more than an adult would. It
also
needs to
be noticed
that not everybody can afford to pay someone to teach their son after
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school
, nor everybody would like to.
Furthermore
,
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languages
are not
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only
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important
for cultural aspects,
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but
also
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because
they can
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allow
to
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move
around the world and
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start
a better career. As an example it would be impossible for an Italian to
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get
a job
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in the United
Kingdom without a
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good
knowledge of English.

In conclusion
,
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people
claim that the teaching of
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languages
should not be compulsory in
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schools
,
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but
I believe
that is
not
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only
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important
,
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but
also
necessary.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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