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In the last century when a human astronaut arrived on the moon, He said “it is a big step for mankind”. But some people say it makes little or no difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In the last century when a human astronaut arrived on the moon, He said “it is a big step for mankind”. But some people say it makes little or no difference to our daily life. v. 1
Almost every day we read something in the papers about the latest exciting developments in the space race. Many people are of the view that all the money and energy spent on space exploration and research is a complete waste because it has no effect on our daily life. I, however disagree. In the following paragraphs I shall discuss how space research has touched our lives in more ways than one. The technology that put men on the moon, launched space shuttles and will build a space station has found its way into everyday life on earth. Common secondary uses of space research are called spin-offs. The common smoke detector used in homes was first prepared for spacecrafts as a warning system. Computer bar codes in retail stores, shock absorbing shoes used by tennis players and athletes, lightweight materials used for helmets and sporting materials and non stick coating used in pans were all first developed as part of space research. Space technology has provided many benefits to the medical field as well. Pace makers used to treat cardiac as well as remote monitoring devices for intensive care patients and portable medical equipment carried aboard ambulances are but a few applications of space technology providing daily benefits in hospitals, offices and homes. Artificial limbs of lesser weight are also a by-product of space research and these are a blessing for the physically challenged. Not only that, it is well known that global warming will soon transform our Earth into a boiling pot. Then it would be very essential to find alternative places to live. If we are able to find signs of life elsewhere in space it would be a jackpot for mankind. To sum up, space exploration and research has touched our everyday lives in numerous ways. So, it definitely is a big step for mankind.
Almost every day we read something in the papers about the latest exciting developments in the
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exploration and
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is a complete waste
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because
it has no effect on our daily life. I,
however
disagree. In the following paragraphs I shall discuss how
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has touched our
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lives
in more ways than one.

The technology that put
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men
on the moon, launched
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shuttles and will build a
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station has found its way into everyday life on earth. Common secondary
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uses
of
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space
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are called
spin-offs. The common smoke detector
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used
in homes was
first
prepared for spacecrafts as a warning system. Computer bar codes in retail stores, shock absorbing shoes
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used
by tennis players and athletes, lightweight materials
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used
for helmets and sporting materials and
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non stick
coating
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used
in pans were all
first
developed as part of
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research.

Space technology has provided
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many
benefits to the medical field
as well
. Pace makers
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used
to treat cardiac
as well
as remote monitoring devices for intensive care patients and portable medical equipment carried aboard ambulances are
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but
a few applications of
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space
technology providing daily benefits in hospitals, offices and homes. Artificial limbs of lesser weight are
also
a by-product of
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space
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research
and these are a blessing for the
physically
challenged.

Not
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only
that, it is well known that global warming will
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soon
transform our Earth into a boiling pot. Then it would be
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very
essential to find alternative places to
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live
. If we are able to find signs of life elsewhere in
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space
it would be a jackpot for mankind.

To sum up,
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space
exploration and
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research
has touched our everyday
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lives
in numerous ways.
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So
, it definitely is a
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big
step for mankind.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the last century when a human astronaut arrived on the moon, He said “it is a big step for mankind”. But some people say it makes little or no difference to our daily life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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