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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing Do you agree or disagree v.1

Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing v. 1
Information technology is one of the most important aspect of our life. And it is marching towards acme day by day, with high speed. But, as it has its pros, it also has its cons which affects our day to day living, at home as well as at work. I personally think, it is not as it looks like, and it has many positive things attached to it. Firstly, I would like to put light on the things, which we can do, by sitting in a house. There are many different works, which we can complete online, instead of going and standing in line. All types of bills like electricity, water, TV, and house rent can be paid from anywhere, in a click of a button. I Know a person, of age 65, who used to stand in line for all this work, no pay, all his bills in the house, sitting on a chair. Hence, information technology has abated all time and the extra efforts we used to put to complete this works. Moving further, we can also talk to people who are way far from us. For example, we can call as well as see them on mobile through Skype or what's up. It helped us to keep in touch with our loved once, even if they are away from us. There is a neighbour of mine, who talks to his daughter who is in Canada, on what's up video call. So the technology has also brought people closer even if they are far from you. Next is, there are many news channels, which shows every day news to us. The news keeps us updated about many things which in turn helps to improve our general knowledge. It is very easy to access news from our mobile. One can simply take out his mobile from a pocket, and by opening any application, can see live news. In conclusion, I would like to say that information technology has reduced our stress and frustration by making our day to day work easier and hence outweigh the disadvantages.
Information
technology
is one of the most
important
aspect of our life. And it is marching towards acme day by day, with high speed.
But
, as it has its pros, it
also
has its cons which affects our
day to day
living, at home
as well
as at
work
. I
personally
think
, it is not as it looks like, and it has
many
positive
things attached to it.

Firstly
, I would like to put light on the things, which we can do, by sitting in a
house
. There are
many
different
works, which we can complete online,
instead
of going and standing in line. All types of bills like electricity, water, TV, and
house
rent can
be paid
from anywhere, in a click of a button. I Know a person, of age 65,
who
used
to stand in line for all this
work
, no pay, all his bills in the
house
, sitting on a chair.
Hence
, information
technology
has abated all time and the extra efforts we
used
to put to complete this works.

Moving
further
, we can
also
talk to
people
who
are way far from us.
For example
, we can call
as well
as
see
them on mobile through Skype or what's up. It
helped
us to
keep
in touch with our
loved
once, even if they are away from us. There is a
neighbour
of mine,
who
talks to his daughter
who
is in Canada, on what's up video call.
So
the
technology
has
also
brought
people
closer even if they are far from you.

Next
is, there are
many
news
channels, which
shows
every day
news
to us. The
news
keeps
us updated about
many
things which in turn
helps
to
improve
our general knowledge. It is
very
easy to access
news
from our mobile. One can
simply
take out his mobile from a pocket, and by opening any application, can
see
live
news.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that information
technology
has
reduced
our
stress
and frustration by making our
day to day
work
easier and
hence
outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
7
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