Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v.1

In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 1
It is always said that the world’s ecosystem is degrading as in case of extinction of plants and animals due to the interference of human beings. Although there are various causes for the loss of bio-diversity, we can have solutions over the problematic areas to solve them. As humans are neglecting the mother nature, due to this negligence, we would sacrifice rare species of animals and plants in the future. The main cause of degradation in the number of species is pollution. As we know, how many industrial plants are present all over the world, these plants pollute the water sources by their side water. This results in the death of many marine species. Some oil companies also spill oil products into the water, which may break the supply of oxygen for sea species. In addition, It is very common for humans to make use of plastic materials in their daily routine. They put those products into water sources like rivers, sea etc. Carelessly which may dilute in it. Consequently, there can cause the death of sea species if any fish swallows it. Moreover, by deforestation, people are making infrastructure progress of their next generations leading to homelessness for animals. For instance, 2700 trees were cut in the Aarey Jungle for the construction of metro car sheds in India at present year. The above-mentioned problems can be solved by changing the living style and infrastructure of society. The First solution is purification of side water to precipitate the chemicals and oil in order to avoid the resulting death of innocent species. The second solution is plantation which will help animals to have more families without breaching their private period and gradually giving growth to their reproduction process. Lastly, the government can issue a constraint on family planning to avoid overpopulation. For instance, One family must give birth to one child only. Taking everything into consideration, Population control, plantation and industries water purification can help to resolve the said major problems to support the world’s ecosystem.
It is always said that the world’s ecosystem is degrading as in case of extinction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
due to the interference of human beings. Although there are various causes for the loss of bio-diversity, we can have solutions over the problematic areas to solve them.

As humans are neglecting the mother nature, due to this negligence, we would sacrifice rare species of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
in the future. The main cause of degradation in the number of species is pollution. As we know, how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
industrial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
are present all over the world, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
pollute the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
sources by their side
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
. This results in the death of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
marine species.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
oil
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
also
spill oil products into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
, which may break the supply of oxygen for sea species.
In addition
, It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
common for humans to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of plastic materials in their daily routine. They put those products into
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
sources like rivers, sea etc.
Carelessly
which may dilute in it.
Consequently
, there can cause the death of sea species if any fish swallows it.
Moreover
, by deforestation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are making infrastructure progress of their
next
generations leading to homelessness for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
For instance
, 2700 trees were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
in the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Aarey
Jungle for the construction of metro car sheds in India at present year.

The above-mentioned problems can
be solved
by changing the living style and infrastructure of society. The
First
solution is purification of side
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
to precipitate the chemicals and oil in order to avoid the resulting death of innocent species.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
second solution is plantation which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
to have more families without breaching their private period and
gradually
giving growth to their reproduction process.
Lastly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can issue a constraint on family planning to avoid overpopulation.
For instance
, One family
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
give birth to one child
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.

Taking everything into consideration, Population control, plantation and industries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
purification can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to resolve the said major problems to support the world’s ecosystem.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts