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Schools have a limited amount of money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spent on good teachers, while others say it should be used for buying equipment like computers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

Schools have a limited amount of money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spent on good teachers, while others say it should be used for buying equipment like computers. 1
Educational institutions need to spend money in an effective way, Few individuals say hiring skilled teachers is the best way and a few others say investing on latest technologies like software and automated equipment, Lets articulate both the views in below paragraphs Quality teaching is dominant in the present education system. Effective teaching can make students knowledgeable. There is a lot of practice that can be done to make students aligned with current trends. for instance, a student is poor in maths or science subject teacher needs to take extra care of him like explaining the content in detail, preparing materials like slide presentations, etc. Good teaching can make the student foundation strong and can become a fruitful achiever. If teachers are paid more salary on their performance basis, they were likely to show more interest On the other hand, technology growing rapidly in day to day life. With the traditional way of teaching adding technology will boost student's intelligence. for instance, at the school level, computer education can give hands-on programming skills to the student. Conducting online classes can attract students who are not willing to come to school. Teachers can create Microsoft PowerPoint presentation slides which is one of an effective manner of teaching. Nowadays everyone is familiar with YouTube, most of the topics are learning by watching YouTube videos In conclusion, although hiring highly skilled teachers are considered to be beneficial for the educational system, technology also play a vital role in student life to boost their education I support both views for the benefit of education system.
Educational institutions need to spend money
Consider replacing "in an effective way" with the adverb for "effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an effective way
, Few individuals say hiring skilled
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teachers
is the best way and a few others say investing on latest
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technologies
like software and automated equipment,
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Lets
articulate both the views in below paragraphs

Quality
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teaching
is dominant in the present
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education
system. Effective
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teaching
can
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make
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students
knowledgeable. There is
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a lot of
practice that can
be done
to
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make
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students
aligned with
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current
trends.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
for
instance, a
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student
is poor in
Possible spelling mistake. 'maths' is British English.
maths
or science subject
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teacher
needs to take extra care of him like explaining the content in detail, preparing materials like slide presentations, etc.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Good
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teaching
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
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student
foundation strong and can become a fruitful achiever. If
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teachers
are paid
more salary on their performance basis, they were likely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
more
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interest


On the other hand
,
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technology
growing
rapidly
in day to day life. With the traditional way of
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teaching
adding
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technology
will boost student's intelligence.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
for
instance, at the school level, computer
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education
can give hands-on programming
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to the
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student
. Conducting online classes can attract
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students
who are not willing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to school.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Teachers
can create Microsoft PowerPoint presentation slides which is one of an effective manner of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
. Nowadays everyone is familiar with YouTube, most of the topics are learning by watching YouTube
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
videos


In conclusion
, although hiring
highly
skilled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
are considered
to be beneficial for the educational system,
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technology
also
play a vital role in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
life to boost their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
I support both views for the benefit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
system.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Schools have a limited amount of money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spent on good teachers, while others say it should be used for buying equipment like computers. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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