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Schools have a limited amount if money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spend on good teachers, while others say it should be spent for computers. discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Schools have a limited amount if money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spend on good teachers, while others say it should be spent for computers. v. 1
Nowadays, certain group of folks suggests, educational institutions should prioritize financing on good tutors, while some argue preference should be given to IT equipments. In my view, an experienced lecturer and tech computers are equally necessary to shape up a child's future. Firstly, over the year's teachers has proved, being the main role in developing a student's academic skills. For an instance, individual attention over weak students and personalized teaching techniques are important as ever before, which all ways come along with good teachers, but it is quite expensive to aford a lesson. Although in Particularly, learning under experienced tutor's, build confidence among students and parents. Especially their innovative explanation techniques in theory subjects like maths, science, and physics is much easier to understand, while helps them to remember at no time. In addition, certain schools enrolling include, student's in special need's, which requires skilled teaching. Furthermore, some students require individual attention on their school work and motivation to overcome the reluctant barrier. A skilled teacher's guidance is all ways important to thrive in our academic or lower school career. Nowadays, it is all most impossible to do anything without computers. For an example, unlimited amount of study materials and most of the job's depend on IT equipments. Internet supported computer's has helped students to read their study materials at any free time, despite them being absent for lecture for some reason. Furthermore students can learn additional skills like AutoCAD and 3D design which is in use for 3D printing and in many industries. Moreover students can refer many tutorials in relation to their course other than buying expensive books and wasting time on library waiting lists. Computer's are essential and the future relies on computing. In conclusion, a very well organized investment is necessary to involve both the teachers and IT solutions, since, computer's and teacher's are equally necessary for a school. Particularly, it is all so recommended to do a feasibility study before choosing good teacher's and computers than throwing the money on the wrong selection.
Nowadays, certain group of folks suggests, educational institutions should prioritize financing on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
tutors, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
argue preference should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to IT equipments. In my view, an experienced lecturer and tech computers are
equally
necessary to shape up a child's future.

Firstly
, over the year's teachers has proved, being the main role in developing a student's academic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. For an instance, individual attention over weak
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and personalized teaching techniques are
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important
as ever
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before
, which
Did you mean "always"?
all ways
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come
along with
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good
teachers,
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but
it is quite expensive to
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aford
a lesson. Although in
Particularly
, learning under experienced tutor's, build confidence among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and parents.
Especially
their innovative explanation techniques in theory subjects like
Possible spelling mistake. 'maths' is British English.
maths
, science, and physics is much easier to understand, while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to remember at no time.
In addition
, certain
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schools
enrolling include, student's in special need's, which requires skilled teaching.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
require individual attention on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
work and motivation to overcome the reluctant barrier. A skilled teacher's guidance is
Did you mean "always"?
all ways
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to thrive in our academic or lower
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school
career.

Nowadays, it is all most impossible to do anything without computers. For an example, unlimited amount of study materials and most of the job's depend on IT equipments. Internet supported computer's has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to read their study materials at any free time, despite them being absent for lecture for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reason.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
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students
can learn additional
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skills
like AutoCAD and 3D design which is in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
for 3D printing and in
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many
industries.
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Moreover
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students
can refer
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many
tutorials in relation to their course other than buying expensive books and wasting time on library waiting lists.
Did you mean the plural instead of the possessive?
Computer's
are essential and the future relies on computing.

In conclusion
, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well organized investment is necessary to involve both the teachers and IT solutions, since, computer's and
Did you mean the plural instead of the possessive?
teacher's
are
equally
necessary for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Particularly
, it is all
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so
The verb 'recommended' is used with the gerund form: "recommended doing".
recommended to do
a feasibility study
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before
choosing
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good
teacher's and computers than throwing the money on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
selection.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Schools have a limited amount if money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spend on good teachers, while others say it should be spent for computers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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