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Say good-bye to the big, multiperson study tables in Turner Library. This summer, the tables will be exchanged for new personal study cubicles—small, one-person desks enclosed by walls. These new units will allow students to have privacy and work in iso v.1

Say good-bye to the big, multiperson study tables in Turner Library. This summer, the tables will be exchanged for new personal study cubicles—small, one-person desks enclosed by walls. These new units will allow students to have privacy and work in iso v. 1
It has been suggested that unpaid community service, for example, working for a charity, should be compulsory in high school. This is beneficial for high school students as they can learn teamwork and may have a sense of inspiration. Firstly, we all know that by assigning group tasks to the students is the way they learn teamwork. But, using real life situations will make students deeply understand how teamwork is. From my personal experience, I joined one of the community services with my classmates at one rural primary school. My duties were taking care of primary school students during breaks and taking photos. Before the service began, we had lots of meetings and preparations as we didn’t want anything to go wrong. During that time, no one was lazy and everyone was very hard-working. When the day came, the experience at school was great and we had no serious problem. This program has nurtured me to understand that if we are joining together to get things done, we will get things done. So, it is important for high school students to learn teamwork through real-life community service. Moreover, by visiting real communities, especially in the rural areas, high school students can feel the real problems instead of memorizing them from the textbooks. And this importance makes some universities encourage their students to organize community services. For example, the National University of Singapore has now partnered with various charities around the globe, sending its students to the rural areas, for instance, West Africa and Southeast Asia. Then, students help those communities through their works such as repairing houses and teaching English to villagers. After they come back to the university, not only experience which they brought, but also, ideas to create innovations to solve those problems they saw during their time in the community service, too. So, gaining ideas and inspirations is achievable through community services. In conclusion, teamwork and inspiration are results from involvement in social works. These benefit students to grow and become mature, responsible and inspired. Therefore, it is recommended for high schools to implement the compulsory community service.
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high
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. This is beneficial for
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as they can learn
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teamwork
and may have a sense of inspiration.

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, we all know that by assigning group tasks to the
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students
is the way they learn
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teamwork
.
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make
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students
deeply
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teamwork
is. From my personal experience, I
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joined
one of the
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community
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services
with my classmates at one rural primary
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school
. My duties were taking care of primary
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school
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students
during breaks and taking photos.
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Before
the
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service
began, we had lots of meetings and preparations as we didn’t want anything to go
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wrong
. During that time, no one was lazy and everyone was
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very
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hard
-working. When the day came, the experience at
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school
was
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great and
we had no serious problem. This program has nurtured me to understand that if we are joining together to
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get
things done, we will
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get
things done.
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, it is
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high
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school
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students
to learn
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teamwork
through real-life
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community
service.

Moreover
, by visiting real
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communities
,
especially
in the rural areas,
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high
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school
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students
can feel the real problems
instead
of memorizing them from the textbooks. And this importance
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makes
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some
universities encourage their
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students
to organize
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community
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services
.
For example
, the National University of Singapore has
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now
partnered with various charities around the globe, sending its
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students
to the rural areas,
for instance
, West Africa and Southeast Asia. Then,
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students
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help
those
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communities
through their works such as repairing
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houses
and teaching English to villagers. After they
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come
back to the university, not
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only
experience which they brought,
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also
,
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ideas
to create innovations to solve those problems they
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saw
during their time in the
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community
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service
, too.
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So
, gaining
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ideas
and inspirations is achievable through
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community
services.

In conclusion
,
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teamwork
and inspiration are results from involvement in social works. These benefit
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students
to grow and become mature, responsible and inspired.
Therefore
, it
is recommended
for
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high
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schools
to implement the compulsory
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community
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service
.
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IELTS essay Say good-bye to the big, multiperson study tables in Turner Library. This summer, the tables will be exchanged for new personal study cubicles—small, one-person desks enclosed by walls. These new units will allow students to have privacy and work in iso v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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