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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v.4

Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 4
Nowadays, air pollution is one of the serious social issues in the world. It is considered that aircraft are the major problem of air pollution and restrictions to this is the only solution to prevent atmosphere impurity. This is a will discuss the reason why I disagree with this statement. To begin with, one of the significant reason for the air contamination is the increased amount of public and private vehicles around the world. Even though flights emits dangerous fuels, the rate of various fuel smoke produced by the vehicles are far more than air travels. For example, nowadays, most of the individuals owe private transportation and the motor fuel emission inclined more, as compared to the past century. Hence, the air pollution also sharply grown up and is adversely affecting the environment. On the one hand, the emerging of several chemical factories also a reason for the increase of contaminated atmosphere. Different industries which are advantageous for the development of the country sometimes become a cause of air pollution. The reason is that the excess burning of pollutant fuel, produces poisonous gases and is discharged to the surroundings. For instance, different power plants which manufacture variety of products used fuel products and the smoke generated are released result in pollution. Therefore, airways are not only the cause of this. To conclude, restricting air craft does not reduce air pollution because the smoke generated from vehicles and factories are also pollutants. The only way to decrease this is to reduce industrialisation and introduce awareness to the public.
Nowadays,
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air
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pollution
is one of the serious social issues in the world. It
is considered
that aircraft are the major problem of
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air
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pollution
and restrictions to this is the
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only
solution to
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prevent
atmosphere impurity. This is a will discuss the
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reason
why I disagree with this statement.

To
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begin
with, one of the significant
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reason
for the
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air
contamination is the increased amount of public and private vehicles around the world.
Even though
flights emits
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dangerous
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fuels
, the rate of various
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fuel
smoke produced by the vehicles are far more than
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air
travels.
For example
, nowadays, most of the individuals owe private transportation and the motor
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fuel
emission inclined more, as compared to the past century.
Hence
, the
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air
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pollution
also
sharply
grown up and is
adversely
affecting the environment.

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also
a
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reason
for the increase of contaminated atmosphere.
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Different
industries which are advantageous for the development of the country
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sometimes
become a cause of
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air
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pollution
. The
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reason
is that the excess burning of pollutant
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fuel
, produces poisonous gases and
is discharged
to the surroundings.
For instance
,
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different
power plants which manufacture variety of products
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used
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fuel
products and the smoke generated
are released
result in
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pollution
.
Therefore
, airways are not
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only
the cause of this.

To conclude
, restricting
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air
craft does not
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reduce
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air
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pollution
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because
the smoke generated from vehicles and factories are
also
pollutants. The
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only
way to decrease this is to
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reduce
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industrialisation
and introduce awareness to the public.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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