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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v.3

Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 3
Some people believe that the only way to reduce air pollution is to limit the number of flights. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, restricting air travel is unlikely to have any real impact on air quality. At the same time, it may adversely affect the economy of the nation. There is no denying the fact that aeroplanes cause air and noise pollution. They produce too much noise and emit harmful gases. While it is possible to control this pollution by reducing the number of flights, it will not fully solve the problem because the majority of pollutants in the air do not come from aircrafts. It is true that air travel has become more affordable and popular recently. However, aeroplanes still are not the primary mode of transport for the majority of people and as such they cannot be considered the number one cause of air pollution. In fact, cars and buses cause more pollution than flights because there are too many of them on the road. What’s more, restricting air travel can have disastrous consequences for the economy. The tourism industry will be the worst hit because limited availability of flights will discourage tourists from visiting foreign countries. Import and export of goods will also be affected. Since both of these factors will affect the financial growth of the country, I do not believe that governments will want to limit air travel. To conclude, restricting air travel is unlikely to improve air quality much because aeroplanes are not the biggest polluters on the planet. What’s more, any such move will have serious economic consequences.
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. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, restricting
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is unlikely to have any real impact on
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quality. At the same time, it may
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cause
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and noise
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pollution
. They produce too much noise and emit harmful gases. While it is possible to control this
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by reducing the number of
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, it will not
fully
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the majority of pollutants in the
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do not
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. It is true that
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has become more affordable and popular recently.
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,
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of them on the road.

What’s more, restricting
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can have disastrous consequences for the economy. The tourism industry will be the worst hit
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because
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will discourage tourists from visiting foreign countries. Import and export of
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also
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affected
. Since both of these factors will affect the financial growth of the country, I do not believe that
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governments
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travel.

To conclude
, restricting
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is unlikely to
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improve
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quality much
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because
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aeroplanes
are not the biggest polluters on the planet. What’s more, any such
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IELTS essay Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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