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Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v.1

Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 1
In recent years, air pollution is one of the major issues to be handled across the globe. Some people opine that to mitigate such problems abating the spreading of air is the superlative solution. This essay will highlight why only curbing air travel will not aid in degrading air pollutions and some other aspects should be acknowledged too. To begin with, air pollution has escalated notably due to various human activities such as industrialization, deforestation, increased private motor vehicles, burning of fossil fuels, etc. Provided that, people assume that restricting air travel aids in obstructing such issues so people are using masks, air humidifier, etc. Do they really are effective to control health issues in individuals and pollution in the society? To cite an example, air borne diseases has raised to 48% among people in Nepal, after the government has introduced laws to travel using masks and various other resources. Therefore, such way of preventing air pollution is regarded not so beneficial and other methods should be undertaken. Nevertheless, human activities is the principal cause for mounting pollution so ultimately best technique to reduce such issues is by controlling such pursuits. Firstly, the government should implement laws to prohibit establishing industries and factories in residential areas. Such places are major source of harmful gases into environmental air. Also, people should forbid deploying private motor vehicles and initiate utilizing ecofriendly vehicles or public transportations. As such four wheelers are responsible for emission of carbon dioxide in atmosphere. For example, in Japan, the government has introduced eco-friendly vehicles for workers and other travelers and in a survey recently taken by the Japanese Environmental department stated that air pollution has dropped from 38% to 20% within a year because of decreased usage of private vehicles. Thus, several aspects should be handled by the government to overcome such issues. In conclusion, I believe that controlling air travel is a laborious task and, not so efficient so other technique should be inaugurated by the government to degrade air pollution. Such issues are perilous and should be counteracted as early as possible.
In recent years,
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air
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pollution
is one of the major
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issues
to
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across the globe.
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Some
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people
opine that to mitigate such problems abating the spreading of
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air
is the superlative solution. This essay will highlight why
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only
curbing
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air
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travel
will not aid in degrading
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air
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pollutions
and
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some
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other
aspects should
be acknowledged
too.

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begin
with,
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air
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pollution
has escalated
notably
due to various human activities such as industrialization, deforestation, increased private motor
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vehicles
, burning of fossil fuels, etc. Provided that,
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people
assume that restricting
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air
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travel
aids in obstructing such
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issues
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so
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people
are using masks,
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air
humidifier, etc. Do they
really
are effective to control health
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issues
in individuals and
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pollution
in the society? To cite an example,
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air
borne diseases has raised to 48% among
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people
in Nepal, after the
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government
has introduced laws to
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travel
using masks and various
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other
resources.
Therefore
, such way of preventing
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air
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pollution
is regarded
not
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so
beneficial and
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other
methods should be undertaken.

Nevertheless
, human activities is the principal cause for mounting
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pollution
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so
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ultimately best
technique to
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reduce
such
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issues
is by controlling such pursuits.
Firstly
, the
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government
should implement laws to prohibit establishing industries and factories in residential areas. Such places are major source of harmful gases into environmental
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air
.
Also
,
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people
should forbid deploying private motor
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vehicles
and initiate utilizing
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ecofriendly
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vehicles
or public transportations. As such four
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wheelers
are responsible for emission of carbon dioxide in atmosphere.
For example
, in Japan, the
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government
has introduced eco-friendly
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vehicles
for workers and
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other
travelers and in a survey recently taken by the Japanese Environmental department stated that
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air
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pollution
has dropped from 38% to 20% within a year
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because
of decreased usage of private
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vehicles
.
Thus
, several aspects should
be handled
by the
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government
to overcome such issues.

In conclusion
, I believe that controlling
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air
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travel
is a laborious task and, not
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so
efficient
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so
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other
technique should
be inaugurated
by the
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government
to degrade
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air
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pollution
. Such
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issues
are perilous and should
be counteracted
as early as possible.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Do you agree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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