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Research shows that overeating is equally harmful to people s health as smoking therefore the advertisements of certain food products should be banned similar to cigarettes To what extent do you agree v.1

Research shows that overeating is equally harmful to people s health as smoking therefore the advertisements of certain food products should be banned similar to cigarettes 1
CERTAIN FOLKS ARGUE THAT IT IS SO BECAUSE MOST OF THE YOUNGER INDIVIDUALS HAVE A CRAZE TO OBTAIN OR SETTLED DOWN IN THE FOREIGN TERRITORIES LIKE US, UK, OR CANADA. WHEREAS, THE REST OF THE INDIVIDUALS THINK THAT THIS CRAZE DO HAVE SOME OTHER CAUSES THAT MAKE THEM LEARN A NEW LANGUAGES. PERHAPS, ACCORDING TO MY VIEW, BOTH THE GROUP OF PEOPLE ARE RIGHT IN THEIR WAY AS EVERYOINE HAS A DIFFERENT REQUIREMENT IN THEIR LIVES TO LEARN SOMETHING NEW. HENCE, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE REASONS BEHIND HAVING SUCH THIINKING AMONG BOTH THE GROUP OF PEOPLE. ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS TRUE THAT WHEN A PERSON GOES TO ANOTHER NATION, NEEDS A LOCAL vocabulary KNOWLEDGE WHERE WANT TO GO SO THAT THE CONVERSATION WILL BE UNDERSTANDABLE IN BITWEEN DISTICT CULTURED FOLKS. FOR EXAMPLE, ACCORDING TO THE FOREIGN DATA OF THE INDIA, 80% CHILDREN LEARN ENGLISH SINCE CHILDHOOD AS THEIR PARENTS HAVE A DREAM TO SEND THEM ANOTHER NATION FOR THE HIGHER STUDIES. ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE PEOPLE WHO HAVE A HABBIT OR PASSION TO KNOW THE DIVERT LANGUAGES JUST TO INCREASE THEIR KNOWLEDGE. AS A RESULT, THEY HAVE THE OPPORTUNITY TO OBTAIN A MORE ACCOMPLISHMENT IN COMPARISON TO PEOPLE WHO KNOW ONE OR TWO LANGUAGES. FOR INSTNACE, ACCORDING TO LANGUAGE DEPARTMENT OF THE UK, 50% OF THE EUROPEAN HAS A PASSION TO KNOW THE DISTINCT ASIAN LANGUAGE FOR GETTING THE BEST JOB IN THOSE COUNTRIES. IN CONCLUSION, KNOWING INTERNATIONAL LANGUAGE INDEED PROVIDE MYRIAD OF BENEFITS TO THE PERSON. THEREFORE, I MUST SUPPORT TO LEARN LANGUAGES FOR THE PEROSN OWN KNOWLEDGE AS EVERYONE FACE THE TIME WHERE THEY FIND IT DIFFICULT TO COMMUICATE WITH OTHER. THIS COULD BE DONE IF ALL THE SHOOL HAVE THE NATION'S ALL THE LANGUAGES.
CERTAIN FOLKS ARGUE THAT IT IS
SO
BECAUSE
MOST OF THE YOUNGER INDIVIDUALS HAVE A CRAZE TO OBTAIN OR SETTLED DOWN IN THE FOREIGN TERRITORIES LIKE US, UK, OR CANADA. WHEREAS, THE REST OF THE INDIVIDUALS
THINK
THAT
THIS CRAZE DO
HAVE
SOME
OTHER CAUSES THAT
MAKE
THEM
LEARN
A NEW
LANGUAGES
. PERHAPS, ACCORDING TO MY VIEW, BOTH THE GROUP OF
PEOPLE
ARE RIGHT IN THEIR WAY AS
EVERYOINE
HAS A
DIFFERENT
REQUIREMENT IN THEIR
LIVES
TO
LEARN
SOMETHING NEW.
HENCE
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE REASONS BEHIND HAVING SUCH
THIINKING
AMONG BOTH THE GROUP OF
PEOPLE
.

ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS TRUE THAT WHEN A PERSON GOES TO ANOTHER NATION, NEEDS A LOCAL vocabulary KNOWLEDGE WHERE WANT TO GO
SO
THAT THE CONVERSATION WILL BE UNDERSTANDABLE IN
BITWEEN
DISTICT
CULTURED FOLKS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ACCORDING TO THE FOREIGN DATA OF THE INDIA, 80% CHILDREN
LEARN
ENGLISH SINCE CHILDHOOD AS THEIR PARENTS HAVE A DREAM TO
SEND
THEM ANOTHER NATION FOR THE HIGHER STUDIES.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, THERE
PEOPLE
WHO HAVE A
HABBIT
OR PASSION TO KNOW
THE DIVERT
LANGUAGES
JUST
TO INCREASE THEIR KNOWLEDGE.
AS A RESULT
, THEY HAVE THE OPPORTUNITY TO OBTAIN A MORE ACCOMPLISHMENT
IN COMPARISON
TO
PEOPLE
WHO KNOW ONE OR TWO
LANGUAGES
. FOR
INSTNACE
, ACCORDING TO
LANGUAGE
DEPARTMENT OF THE UK, 50% OF THE EUROPEAN HAS A PASSION TO KNOW THE DISTINCT ASIAN
LANGUAGE
FOR GETTING THE BEST JOB IN THOSE COUNTRIES.

IN CONCLUSION
, KNOWING INTERNATIONAL
LANGUAGE
INDEED
PROVIDE MYRIAD OF BENEFITS TO THE PERSON.
THEREFORE
, I
MUST
SUPPORT TO
LEARN
LANGUAGES
FOR THE
PEROSN
OWN
KNOWLEDGE AS EVERYONE
FACE
THE
TIME WHERE
THEY FIND IT DIFFICULT TO
COMMUICATE
WITH OTHER. THIS COULD
BE DONE
IF ALL THE
SHOOL
HAVE THE NATION'S ALL THE
LANGUAGES
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Research shows that overeating is equally harmful to people s health as smoking therefore the advertisements of certain food products should be banned similar to cigarettes 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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