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Recently some students need to arrive at school early in the morning. Some people think that starting school day early is a good approach to support learning, while others think it should be a better idea for students to attend school at a later time. Wha v.2

Recently some students need to arrive at school early in the morning. Some people think that starting school day early is a good approach to support learning, while others think it should be a better idea for students to attend school at a later time. Wha v. 2
In the contemporary society, the length of study time on the part of students has become one of the most hotly debated issue among the general public. When it comes to whether students should be required to arrive school at the early time in the morning, people’s notions may vary from one to another. In my eyes, starting school day at a late time is a better choice for the following reasons. To begin with, arriving school at the late time will ensure students have a good rest and thus contributes to the improvement of their study efficiency. As is common sense, the increasingly heavy study burden on the shoulder of students has squeezed their leisure time so much that their sleeping time cannot be guaranteed. As a result, with the implementation of starting school day in a late time, the quality of their rest will be improved, with the consequence that their attention will be more concentrated in class. On the contrary, shortening their rest time by requesting students begin class early will definitely produce a negative effect on their study. To be specific, it will be common to observe that students feel so sleepy as to have a short nap during the class. In addition, students who start school day in a late time will obviously avoid being stuck in traffic jam and thus have a better mood in the morning. Undoubtedly, under the drive of a cheerful frame of mind, children will raise their efficiency of study to a large extent. The experience of my cousin, Tom, can serve as a good example to shed some lights on the above reasoning. Tom, a student in a middle school of Beijing, used to be required to arrive school at 8 a. m. every morning in order to prepare better for the National Examination of College Admission. However, the problem is that according to the regulations of most companies, employees also have to start work at 8 a. m. Therefore, it is not hard to imagine that the subways, buses and taxis are crowded with people in the morning. According to Tom’s recounting, no one will feel good after such a experience, let alone immediately devoting him/herself to study. Taking what has been discussed into consideration, we can draw the conclusion that it is wise to require student to arrive school at a late time in the morning, in order to ensure the quality of their rest and develop a light heart.
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on the part of
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has become one of the most
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debated issue among the
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general public
. When it
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students
should
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school
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day at a
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is a better choice for the following reasons.

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with, arriving
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have a
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rest
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efficiency. As is common sense, the
increasingly
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burden on the shoulder of
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has squeezed their leisure
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much that their sleeping
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cannot
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.
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, the quality of their
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will be
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improved
, with the consequence that their attention will be more concentrated in
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class
.
On the contrary
, shortening their
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rest
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time
by requesting
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students
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begin
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early will definitely produce a
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effect on their
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. To be specific, it will be common to observe that
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feel
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class
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day in a
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will
obviously
avoid
being stuck
in traffic jam and
thus
have a better mood in the
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morning
.
Undoubtedly
, under the drive of a cheerful frame of mind, children will raise their efficiency of
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study
to a large extent. The experience of my cousin, Tom, can serve as a
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good
example to shed
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some
lights on the above reasoning. Tom, a
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student
in a middle
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of Beijing,
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used
to
be required
to arrive
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school
at 8 a. m. every
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morning
in order to prepare better for the National Examination of College Admission.
However
, the problem is that according to the regulations of most
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companies
, employees
also
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start
work at 8 a. m.
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, it is not
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hard
to imagine that the subways, buses and taxis
are crowded
with
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people
in the
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morning
. According to Tom’s recounting, no one will feel
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good
after such
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experience,
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alone immediately devoting him/herself to study.

Taking what has
been discussed
into consideration, we can draw the conclusion that it is wise to require
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student
to arrive
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school
at a
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late
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time
in the
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morning
, in order to ensure the quality of their
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rest
and develop a light heart.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Recently some students need to arrive at school early in the morning. Some people think that starting school day early is a good approach to support learning, while others think it should be a better idea for students to attend school at a later time. Wha v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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