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All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary. Write a response in which you discu v.2

All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary. Write a response in which you discu v. 2
Nowadays, a trend towards hiring outside consultants for decision making and welfare has been observed. Managers believe that by taking consultation from an outsider veteran will help in the lucarative sector of the industry. Rather, if own employers would be given an opportunity to participate in companies decision making, company’s profit will be large and thus outside consultants would be unnecessary. I strongly agree with this notion and this parley is going to exemplify the notion and finally the conclusion will be stated. First of all, for any company’s profit is completely dependent on their employees. Employees are not dependant on employer rather the vice versa stands true as well. At past, it has observed that managers always had faith on their subordinates and they allowed them to actively participate in decision making. However, these days autocratic leadership of managers failed to take views of their employers in company’s profit. For instance, Ratan Tata company located in Jharkhand India always believe in the concept of democratic leadership approach where information and data are collected even from group C and D employees for the progress of the industry. Secondly, many employees from more than decades have rendered for the company have much knowledge about the company. They have already seen all ups and downsides and even have previous experience how to tackle the problems. Additionally, outside consultants reliability in making profit is again doubtful. Although they have experience in handling such catastrophic situation, but in this competitive environment the flip side of the coin may happen. Some may be involved in making the company downside by taking money from company’s competitors. To illustrate, in past several famous company’s had lost their avenues by interference of outside persons. Finally, if the employees will be value bounded and will be given opportunity to sort out various simple issues from early period, gradually they will feel they are inseparable from the organization. Thus, in later stage they will contribute to profit of the industry by taking big decisions. Above all, the cost of hiring an outsiders can be avoided. To conclude, although many people believe that employing an outside expert will help in company’s profit but I strongly disagree with this statement as the counter side may happen. Moreover, if the own employees will be allowed to take active role in decision making, no doubt about it that company will reach new heights of success.
Nowadays, a trend towards hiring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outside
consultants for
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
and welfare has
been observed
. Managers believe that by taking consultation from an outsider veteran will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in the
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lucarative
sector of the industry.
Rather
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
employers would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an opportunity to participate in
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companies
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
,
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company’s
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profit
will be large and
thus
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outside
consultants would be unnecessary. I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this notion and this parley is going to exemplify the notion and
finally
the conclusion will
be stated
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, for any
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company’s
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profit
is completely dependent on their
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employees
.
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Employees
are not
Did you mean "dependent" on?
dependant
on employer
rather
the vice versa stands true
as well
. At past, it has observed that managers always had faith on their
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subordinates and
they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
them to
actively
participate in
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
.
However
, these days autocratic leadership of managers failed to take views of their employers in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
profit
.
For instance
,
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Ratan
Tata
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company
located in Jharkhand India always believe in the concept of democratic leadership approach where information and data
are collected
even from group C and D
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employees
for the progress of the industry.

Secondly
,
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many
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employees
from more than decades have rendered for the
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company
have much knowledge about the
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company
. They have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
all ups and downsides and even have previous experience how to tackle the problems.

Additionally
,
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outside
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consultants
reliability in making
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profit
is again doubtful. Although they have experience in handling such catastrophic situation,
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but
in this competitive environment the flip side of the coin may happen.
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Some
may
be involved
in making the
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company
downside by taking money from
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company’s
competitors. To illustrate, in past several
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famous
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company’s
had lost their avenues by interference of
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outside
persons.

Finally
, if the
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employees
will be value bounded and will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
opportunity to sort out various simple issues from early period,
gradually
they will feel they are inseparable from the organization.
Thus
, in later stage they will contribute to
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profit
of the industry by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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decisions
.
Above all
, the cost of hiring
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an outsiders
can
be avoided
.

To conclude
, although
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many
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people
believe that employing an
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outside
expert will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in
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company’s
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profit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
strongly
disagree with this statement as the counter side may happen.
Moreover
, if the
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own
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employees
will be
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allowed
to take active role in
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
, no doubt about it that
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company
will reach new heights of success.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary. Write a response in which you discu v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
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