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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v.6

Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 6
Recently, it has become a matter of debate whether money should be spent on building new infrastructure rather than maintaining or repairing the old vintage monuments and building that holds historically valuable information and bring lots of opportunities for the country. It is certainly true that old buildings are not easy to take care and they are high on maintenance as compared to newly build infrastructure. In my opinion I completely disagree with this idea as old buildings play an important role describing and unfold the history and are important to be taken care rather than building new structures. This essay will shed light on factors why it's important to maintain old monuments and building instead of spending money on new infrastructure. In addition to that old monuments and buildings are unique have significance and people love to know about, t, These old historical buildings brings employment and tourist to the cities that help grow economically as well as many people from the country get jobs. There are several examples of old monuments and vintage old buildings that are unique for example Ajanta Caves located in Maharashtra, Which have some amazing stone carved into life of Buddha with huge sculptures That cannot be built again. These kind of distinctive monuments attracts other people to visit and help local people getting financial growth. for instance, many governments spend million of dollars on their old historical buildings so the don't loose their tourist and historical values. In conclusion, spending money on old construction and preserving them is good for the country instead of spending money on the new property. Old and Historical structure are important and bring economical growth to the country by bringing tourist jobs and raising some awareness about these places among other country.
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old
vintage
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monuments
and
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valuable information and bring lots of opportunities for the
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. It is
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buildings
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care and
they are high on maintenance as compared to
newly
build infrastructure. In my opinion I completely disagree with this
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important
role describing and unfold the history and are
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important
to
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rather
than
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new
structures. This essay will shed light on factors why it's
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important
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old
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are unique have significance and
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historical
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brings employment and tourist to the cities that
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and vintage
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Caves located in Maharashtra, Which have
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amazing stone carved into life of Buddha with huge
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sculptures


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be built
again.
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of distinctive
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monuments
attracts other
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people
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, spending
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construction and preserving them is
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important
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economical
growth to the
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country
by bringing tourist jobs and raising
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some
awareness about these places among other
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IELTS essay Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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