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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v.5

Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 5
As Mahatma Gandhi, the father of India had said ' A society can be judged by the way the animals are treated'; animals are an important part of the food chain. A recent study has shown that the wildlife population has been decreasing at a rapid rate. This essay gingerly delineated the causes and problems along with the solution in the following paragraphs. With the increase in human population, the animal population has been dwindling; this is primarily because of human encroachment on their natural habitats. People are increasingly cutting down forests in order to acquire more space for agriculture, construction and for living purposes. Humans are also reclaiming portions of the sea as the amount of land is not enough for the growing population. Furthermore, bush-fires in Australia and the Amazon forest fires has also led to many animal and bird species becoming endangered. The wildfires are mainly due to global warming caused by factories, burning garbage and the use of aerosols. It is high time we took note of all the warning's nature is giving us; it is time to act. We should plant more trees in order to bring down the temperature from increasing yearly. Moreover, the use of aerosols, burning of grass stubble and our carbon footprint should be reduced. The animals which are endangered should be monitored closely to prevent them from getting extinct. To substantiate further, we could also collectively stop water, air and land pollution in order to make the environment more suitable for the fauna. We could also contribute by being a part of various NGO's that address the needs of animals. Wildlife population diminishing is irrefutably a major concern worldwide; as responsible citizens, it is our duty to take care of animals and ensure they have a habitat that is suitable and appropriate for a living. Collectively, we can make a considerable change.
As Mahatma Gandhi, the father of India had said
'
A society can
be judged
by
the way the
animals
are treated
';
animals
are an
important
part of the food chain. A recent study has shown that the wildlife
population
has been decreasing at a rapid rate. This essay
gingerly
delineated the causes and problems along with the solution in the following paragraphs.

With the increase in human
population
, the
animal
population
has been dwindling; this is
primarily
because
of human encroachment on their natural habitats.
People
are
increasingly
cutting down forests in order to acquire more space for agriculture, construction and for living purposes. Humans are
also
reclaiming portions of the sea as the amount of land is not
enough
for the growing
population
.
Furthermore
, bush-fires in Australia and the Amazon forest fires has
also
led to
many
animal
and bird species becoming endangered. The wildfires are
mainly
due to global warming caused by factories, burning garbage and the
use
of aerosols.

It is high time we took note of all the warning's nature is giving us; it is time to act. We should plant more trees in order to bring down the temperature from increasing yearly.
Moreover
, the
use
of aerosols, burning of grass stubble and our carbon footprint should be
reduced
. The
animals
which
are endangered
should
be monitored
closely
to
prevent
them from getting extinct. To substantiate
further
, we could
also
collectively
stop
water, air and land pollution in order to
make
the environment more suitable for the fauna. We could
also
contribute by being a part of various NGO's that address the needs of animals.

Wildlife
population
diminishing is
irrefutably
a major concern worldwide; as responsible citizens, it is our duty to take care of
animals
and ensure they have a habitat
that is
suitable and appropriate for a living.
Collectively
, we can
make
a considerable
change
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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