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In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do the disadvantages of this situation outweigh the advantages v.2

In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do the disadvantages of this situation outweigh the advantages v. 2
On no account should the issue with traffic on the roads be ignored. To deal with this problem in some countries it has been decided to reduce the number of private cars. I believe that the benefits of using buses and other modes of public transport far outweigh their drawbacks. This essay will first discuss using public modes of transport as the main benefit of improving the situation on the roads, followed by an analysis of a probable drawback which is the inconvenience of car using to get to the remote areas One of the advantages of using public transportation is reducing the amount of traffic stream. Not only does it put extra strain on the traffic, but it has also an effect on air pollution. For example, the government of Singapore restricted the number of cars by imposing extra taxes on private vehicles’ ownership. This has helped to handle the amount of traffic within a restricted area and to improve the situation with THE environment On the other hand, one of the probable drawbacks of using buses as a means of transportation is the inconvenience to get to far places due to the separation of work and residential areas. This is because some countries are believed to be places where it is almost impossible to manage without cars. For example, in Canada, it also might be complicated to get to work by car. However, this situation is rare, happening only in a relatively small number of countries. In conclusion, I am convinced that the benefits of public transport far outweigh the disadvantages because it diminishes the ratio of traffic congestion and extra strain on the roads.
On no account should the issue with
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traffic
on the roads be
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ignored
. To deal with this problem in
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some
countries it has
been decided
to
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reduce
the number of private
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cars
. I believe that the benefits of using buses and other modes of
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public
transport far outweigh their drawbacks. This essay will
first
discuss using
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public
modes of transport as the main benefit of improving the situation on the roads, followed by an analysis of a probable drawback which is the inconvenience of
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car
using to
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get
to the remote
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areas


One of the advantages of using
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public
transportation is reducing the amount of
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traffic
stream. Not
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only
does it put extra strain on the
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traffic
,
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but
it has
also
an effect on air pollution.
For example
, the
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government
of Singapore restricted the number of
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cars
by imposing extra taxes on private vehicles’ ownership. This has
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helped
to handle the amount of
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traffic
within a restricted area and to
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improve
the situation with THE
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environment


On the other hand
, one of the probable drawbacks of using buses as a means of transportation is the inconvenience to
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get
to far places due to the separation of work and residential areas. This is
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because
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some
countries
are believed
to be places where it is almost impossible to manage without
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cars
.
For example
, in Canada, it
also
might
be complicated
to
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get
to work by
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car
.
However
, this situation is rare, happening
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only
in a
relatively
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small
number of countries.

In conclusion
, I
am convinced
that the benefits of
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public
transport far outweigh the disadvantages
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because
it diminishes the ratio of
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traffic
congestion and extra strain on the roads.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do the disadvantages of this situation outweigh the advantages v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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