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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.21

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 21
It is a deniable fact that Childhood is the most lovable period by most of the people. Many of us do have numerous memories while young, with our Siblings, our friends, especially it is the time when we may have gained knowledge on the majority of it that we knew Today. Some people often argue that Children should be sent to the School as quickly as possible, while some delay to join their loved one's to the school as they believe that Home is the best Teaching area. First of All, Mother tongue, the name itself suggests that the language any kid learn is being taught by their Mother and we all must accept the fact that kids try to Mimic what elders do. So, they try to grab much of what their parents do. During their initial years they do learn new things like language, habits, basic hygiene only from Parents. Certainly, The School is one of the places where any individual's maturity gets triggered. Children get exposed to various Cultures, mindsets, kinds of behaviour in the classroom the most. Teachers start teaching discipline, manners and etiquette to the youth. Youngsters would start identifying the difference between good and bad when they start mingling with co-students. Kids start doing new things and teachers do their duty of correcting them and making them used to better things daily. In my opinion, Parents can make their younger ones learn the best behaviour, but should recognise that they too have some limitation. They can limit themselves by making the child learn for few initial years out of them and then should send children to the school, as it is the place where they get exposed to the actual world.
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argue that Children should be
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quickly
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some
delay to
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one's to the
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school
as they believe that Home is the best Teaching area.

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First of All
, Mother tongue, the name itself suggests that the language any kid
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being taught
by their
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Mother and
we all
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accept the fact that kids try to Mimic what elders do.
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So
, they try to grab much of what their parents do. During their initial years they do
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learn
new things like language, habits, basic hygiene
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only
from Parents.

Certainly
, The
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School
is one of the places where any individual's maturity
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triggered. Children
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exposed to various Cultures, mindsets, kinds of
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behaviour
in the classroom the most. Teachers
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start
teaching discipline, manners and etiquette to the youth. Youngsters would
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start
identifying the difference between
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good
and
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bad
when they
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start
mingling with co-students. Kids
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start
doing new things and teachers do their duty of correcting them and making them
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used
to better things daily.

In my opinion, Parents can
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make
their younger ones
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learn
the best
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behaviour
,
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should
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recognise
that they too have
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some
limitation. They can limit themselves by making the child
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learn
for few initial years out of them and then should
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send
children to the
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school
, as it is the place where they
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get
exposed to the actual world.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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