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Recently, people are becoming less and less polite. What are the reasons for this behaviour? Do you agree with the statement? Give examples and experience. v.1

Recently, people are becoming less and less polite. What are the reasons for this behaviour? Give examples and experience. v. 1
As of right now, there is a continued rise in the overall population of the world, and it might be considered as the greatest issue faced by the society. There are multiple reasons for this, one of the most important one being that, there is not much of awareness in a considerable amount of individuals. In this essay, the causes of this situation and why it is, to a great extent, the greatest problem faced by everyone on this planet, in the present times, will be discussed. This continued rise in population leads to a lot of problems. The majority of the masses are not aware of the consequences that our future generations are going to face in the future due to this problem. Moreover, even though there are people who do know about this situation, some of them do not care as, they think that it isn't their problem because they are not the ones facing the consequences. The ones that come from a poor background, some of them, might want more children as they would like to have a large family, so that they can earn more money as a family. It can be argued that the increasing population is the greatest problem, presently, faced by the majority of us. Firstly, there are many problems that are stemming from the increasing population, for example, all kinds of pollution, traffic congestion and many others. Furthermore, due to an extremely large population, not everyone can gain quality education, in fact, only a small percentage of people have that luxury, and due to this, most of the young people are either unemployed or have to settle for a minimum wage. Therefore, it is, indirectly, the cause of extreme poverty, especially in countries that have an extremely large population, for instance, countries like India. In conclusion, the major cause of this issue is the lack of awareness amongst the people, and it is, arguably, the biggest problem faced by the human race at the present times as it results in most of the other major problems faced, for instance, air pollution, water pollution, traffic and so on. Hence, I do agree that, it is the greatest issue faced by us.
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, there is a continued rise in the
overall
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population
of the world, and it might
be considered
as the
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greatest
issue
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faced
by the society. There are multiple reasons for this, one of the most
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important
one being that, there is not much of awareness in a considerable amount of individuals. In this essay, the causes of this situation and why it is, to a great extent, the
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greatest
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problem
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faced
by everyone on this planet, in the present times, will
be discussed
.

This continued rise in
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population
leads to
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a lot of
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problems
. The majority of the masses are not aware of the consequences that our future generations are going to face in the future due to this
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problem
.
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,
even though
there are
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people
who do know about this situation,
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some
of them do not care as, they
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problem
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because
they are not the
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facing the consequences. The
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ones
that
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come
from a poor background,
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of them, might want more children as they would like to have a large family,
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that they can earn more money as a family.

It can
be argued
that the increasing
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population
is the
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greatest
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,
presently
,
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faced
by the majority of us.
Firstly
, there are
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problems
that are stemming from the increasing
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population
,
for example
, all kinds of pollution, traffic congestion and
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others.
Furthermore
, due to an
extremely
large
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population
, not everyone can gain quality education, in fact,
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only
a
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have that luxury, and due to this, most of the young
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people
are either unemployed or
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have to
settle for a minimum wage.
Therefore
, it is,
indirectly
, the cause of extreme poverty,
especially
in countries that have an
extremely
large
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population
,
for instance
, countries like India.

In conclusion
, the major cause of this issue is the lack of awareness amongst the
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people
, and it is,
arguably
, the biggest
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problem
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faced
by the human race at the present times as it results in most of the other major
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problems
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faced
,
for instance
, air pollution, water pollution, traffic and
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so
on.
Hence
, I do
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agree
that, it is the
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greatest
issue
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faced
by us.
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IELTS essay Recently, people are becoming less and less polite. What are the reasons for this behaviour? Give examples and experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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