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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.3

Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 3
it seems to be an increasingly widespread concern that our environmental problems are worse and worse in any part of the world and we must take action on them before everything becomes too late. Some people suppose that environmental protection is only feasible at a macro level, however, I disagree with this point of view. We cannot deny that the role of governments and organizations in protecting our planet is extremely important and there are things that citizens are unable to do but governments can. An example of that is the budget for programs to fight against climate change is so enormous that individuals cannot afford. Besides, when it comes to managing enterprises to circumscribe the quantity of emissions from factories, it is the governments from various continents who discuss and produce accords such as the 1992 United Nation Framework Convention on Climate Change and Paris Agreement in 2015. Nevertheless, that is not to say that there is nothing that a person can do. It is clear that people are so aware of the impacts they have on the environment now. A single action like turning off the light when it is unnecessarily used may be of insignificance, but if we consider the bigger picture when everybody in the world does the same, we will benefit greatly from it. In addition, the public’s consuming behaviors may lead companies to produce more environmentally friendly products. For instance, if people refuse to buy goods contained in plastic bags, stores and supermarkets will change to other types of bag that are more eco-friendly. In a nutshell, to save the green of our world, it is the duty of not only international institutions and nations but also everybody in anywhere. What everyone should do is to do one’s part well and spread it to others. By acting as soon as possible, can we secure the future for our next generations.
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it
seems to be an
increasingly
widespread concern that our environmental problems are worse and worse in any part of the
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world and
we
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must
take action on them
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before
everything becomes too late.
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Some
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people
suppose that environmental protection is
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only
feasible at a macro level,
however
, I disagree with this point of view.

We cannot deny that the role of
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governments
and organizations in protecting our planet is
extremely
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important
and there are things that citizens are unable to do
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but
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governments
can. An example of
that is
the budget for programs to fight against climate
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change
is
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so
enormous that individuals cannot afford.
Besides
, when it
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comes
to managing enterprises to circumscribe the quantity of emissions from factories, it is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
from various continents who discuss and produce accords such as the 1992 United Nation Framework Convention on Climate
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Change
and Paris Agreement in 2015.

Nevertheless
,
that is
not to say that there is nothing that a person can do. It is
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clear
that
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people
are
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so
aware of the impacts they have on the environment
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now
. A single action like turning off the light when it is
unnecessarily
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used
may be of insignificance,
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but
if we consider the bigger picture when everybody in the world does the same, we will benefit
greatly
from it.
In addition
, the public’s consuming behaviors may lead
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to produce more
environmentally
friendly products.
For instance
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
refuse to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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goods
contained in plastic bags, stores and supermarkets will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to other types of bag that are more eco-friendly.

In a nutshell, to save the green of our world, it is the duty of not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
international institutions and nations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
everybody in anywhere. What everyone should do is to do one’s part well and spread it to others. By acting as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible, can we secure the future for our
next
generations.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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