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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.4

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. v. 4
Due to modernisation most of the couples are spending together in living relationship and it is casual due to intercourse female can be pregnant due to lack of precautions but we cannot deny that due to negligence abortion cases on peak. In following paragraphs, I am going to discuss both phases of this scenario. In the begin with, the legality of abortion will lead to create more abortion cases due to female is suffering not having pregnancy after so many abortions when they actually want to have a kid. Secondly, it increases gender inequality, for example: In Indian abortion is completely illegal as illiterate people still give more preference to have a male kid as compared to female child which disturb the gender equality ratio. Thirdly, Abortion is a loss of life given by god to female, it totally against the rules of nature as it should go according to the what creature have been made for the human. However, declaration of illegality of abortion sometime ruin the family planning, to be clear if a female gets pregnant unexpectedly where couples not ready yet to take the responsibility for the baby so in this time only abortion is solution for partners. In addition to, some couples planned the strength of babies where one more baby can create problem for mothers to take care of all kids at one time. To encapsulate, legalization of abortion in developed countries is not a problem, but couples should understand the bad influence on female health if it happened repeatedly. I think abortion legality should depend on country to country because some people use in a wrong way like I explained in the example, so governments have to analysis, it’s all negative and positive effects according to the nation before legalizing the abortion.
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to
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modernisation
most of the
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couples
are spending together in living relationship and it is casual
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due
to intercourse
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female
can be pregnant
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due
to lack of precautions
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but
we cannot deny that
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due
to negligence
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abortion
cases on peak. In following paragraphs, I am going to discuss both phases of this scenario.

In the
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begin
with, the legality of
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abortion
will lead to create more
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abortion
cases
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due
to
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female
is suffering not having pregnancy after
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so
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many
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abortions
when they actually want to have a kid.
Secondly
, it increases gender inequality,
for example
: In Indian
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abortion
is completely illegal as illiterate
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people
still
give more preference to have a male kid as compared to
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female
child which disturb the gender equality ratio.
Thirdly
,
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Abortion
is a loss of life
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given
by god to
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female
, it
totally
against the
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rules
of nature as it should go according to the what creature have
been made
for the human.

However
, declaration of illegality of
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abortion
sometime ruin the family planning, to be
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clear
if a
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female
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gets
pregnant
unexpectedly
where
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couples
not ready
yet
to take the responsibility for the baby
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so
in this time
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only
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abortion
is solution for partners.
In addition
to,
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some
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couples
planned the strength of babies where one more baby can create problem for mothers to take care of all kids at one time.

To encapsulate, legalization of
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abortion
in
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developed countries
is not a problem,
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but
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couples
should understand the
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bad
influence on
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female
health if it happened
repeatedly
. I
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think
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abortion
legality should depend on country to country
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because
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some
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people
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use
in a
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wrong
way like I
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explained
in the example,
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governments
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analysis, it’s all
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negative
and
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positive
effects according to the nation
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before
legalizing the
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abortion
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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