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Write about the following topic. Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your v.31

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Give reasons for your v. 31
Nowadays, abortion is increasing rapidly which they consider as legal while others are thinking as abortion is illegal. They are several points which we can consider the account to make it illegal. In this essay, I can derive the situations and health issues if they do abortion normally. Generally, many of the countries have grown a lot but still some countries are not in the developing countries. Many people are still in below poverty and they can not handle the family. These people are planning to have an abortion when they get girl baby, their thought that they can not nurture girl baby. They don' t have an idea and they don' t have a much knowledge about this issue and what will happen to the mother. First up all, on the abovementioned reason, people are considering to go for an abortion which will impact their health severely. some of them are affecting mentally and physically. Some of them, they are losing their weight and even miscarriage problems. Even the worst scenario, people are dying due to this problem. Other causes included such as vascular disease diabetes, other hormonal problems, infection and other abnormalities of the uterus. They are not much awareness provided by the government. Also, the government should be banned or illegal it this one in order to the public try to destroy one human being. We do not have an authority to kill anyone. After slicing and dicing this, the government has to take the responsibilities to make it illegal or should be banned whoever plans to go for an abortion and also their duty to conducts some health awareness to all the community to avoid this issue. Women health always is very important to grow up the entire family with full of happiness.
Nowadays,
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abortion
is increasing
rapidly
which they consider as legal while others are thinking as
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abortion
is
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illegal
. They are several points which we can consider the account to
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make
it
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illegal
. In this essay, I can derive the situations and
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health
issues if they do
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abortion
normally
.

Generally
,
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many
of the countries have grown a lot
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but
still
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some
countries are not in the
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developing countries
.
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Many
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people
are
still
in below
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poverty and
they can not handle the family. These
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people
are planning to have an
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abortion
when they
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get
girl baby, their
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thought
that they can not nurture girl baby. They
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don&
#039; t have an
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idea and
they
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don&
#039; t have
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a much
knowledge about this issue and what will happen to the mother.

First
up all, on the
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abovementioned
reason,
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people
are considering to go for an
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abortion
which will impact their
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health
severely
.
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some
of them are affecting mentally and
physically
.
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Some
of them, they are losing their weight and even miscarriage problems. Even the worst scenario,
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people
are dying due to this problem.
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Other
causes included such as vascular disease diabetes,
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other
hormonal problems, infection and
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other
abnormalities of the uterus. They are not much awareness provided by the
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government
.
Also
, the
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government
should
be banned
or
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illegal
it this one in order to the public try to
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destroy
one human being. We do not have an authority to kill anyone.

After slicing and dicing this, the
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government
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has to
take the responsibilities to
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make
it
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illegal
or should
be banned
whoever plans to go for an
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abortion
and
also
their duty to conducts
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some
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health
awareness to all the community to avoid this issue. Women
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health
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always is
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very
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important
to grow up the entire family with full of happiness.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Give reasons for your v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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