Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Write about the following topic. Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your v.16

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Give reasons for your v. 16
It has been seen that, the well off countries support the not so privileged countries by providing them support in monetary terms, but this form of support is unable to change the status quo of the countries at the receiving end. However, it is argued that this support should be extended in a form other than cash and this essay fully agrees that mere cash handouts to these nations will not uplift their economy and investment should be made directly in these countries. The main reason why simply transferring funds to the economically weak countries is corruption at the government level. It has been reported by many of the international organizations working to reduce poverty in the underdeveloped countries, that misuse at the higher levels never allow the benefits of the aid to reach the ordinary people. It must be noted, however, that sometimes these countries are in need of hard cash to pay off their debts for the benefit of their people in the long term. Secondly, the lack of proper infrastructure and advanced technology makes it hard for the aided countries to utilize the grants in an optimal manner to have a long term effect on the prosperity of its people. Therefore, it is much better for the developed countries to invest in the infrastructure that will help to create more jobs and will have a major impact on the reduction of poverty. In conclusion, simply handing out money to the underdeveloped countries will not help them escape the vicious circle of poverty and help in other forms must be extended to enable them to break free from their current state.
It has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that, the well off
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
the not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
privileged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
by providing them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
in monetary terms,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this form of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
is unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the status quo of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
at the receiving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.
However
, it
is argued
that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
should
be extended
in a form other than cash and this essay
fully
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agrees
that mere cash handouts to these nations will not uplift their economy and investment should
be made
directly
in these countries.

The main reason why
simply
transferring funds to the
economically
weak
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
is corruption at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
level. It has
been reported
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the international organizations working to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
poverty in the underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, that misuse at the higher levels never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the benefits of the aid to reach the ordinary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be noted
,
however
, that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
are in need of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
cash to pay off their debts for the benefit of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the long term.

Secondly
, the lack of proper infrastructure and advanced technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for the aided
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
to utilize the grants
Consider replacing "in an optimal manner" with the adverb for "optimal"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an optimal manner
to have a long term effect on the prosperity of its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Therefore
, it is much better for the developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
to invest in the infrastructure that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to create more jobs and will have a major impact on the reduction of poverty.

In conclusion
,
simply
handing out money to the underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them escape the vicious circle of poverty and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in other forms
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be extended
to enable them to break free from their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
state.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
A special kind of beauty exists which is born in language, of language, and for language.
Gaston Bachelard

IELTS essay Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Give reasons for your v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts