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These days it seems that an increasing number of people are leaving rural areas to live in the city. Discuss some of the effects of rural depopulation (migration from the country to the city) and suggest some ways in which this trend would be reversed. v.1

These days it seems that an increasing number of people are leaving rural areas to live in the city. Discuss some of the effects of rural depopulation (migration from the country to the city) and suggest some ways in which this trend would be reversed. v. 1
Nowadays, there are more and more people who move from the countryside to urban areas. It is therefore worth examining the possible problems of this trend and suggesting measures that should be taken to address the issue. Migration from the country to the city has posed real challenges. A central issue is that leaving the rural areas to urban areas has presented severe environmental threats in cities. A large number of city dwellers leads to increasing demand for water, energy, as well as more pollutant output, which can contaminate the environment in these areas. In addition, the decrease in living quality in urban areas is another direct result of this phenomenons. housing, sewage and health care in a city have their own limitations, if the number of city inhabitants exceeds that limit, there will be someone who cannot have these basic living needs. Serious attempts must be made to remedy the situation. An effective solution to deal with the living standard problem would be to improve the living conditions in both the city and the countryside. More specifically, the government should improve the health care system, sewage system and boost the supply of affordable accommodation in urban and rural areas, so that people don’t need to migrate to the city to make both their and others’ living quality go down. Furthermore, a possible way to eliminate environmental threats on large urban centres is to promote ecologically responsible behaviour. Cities dwellers should be encouraged to use public transport, eco-friendly vehicles instead, reduce their energy use and their waste output, pollution level can be brought down. In conclusion, leaving bucolics to live in urban areas can cause environmental issues and a lower living standard. If people can join hands to help, these bad effects will no longer be the problem.
Nowadays, there are more and more
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people
who
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move
from the countryside to
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urban
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areas
. It is
therefore
worth examining the possible problems of this trend and suggesting measures that should
be taken
to address the issue.

Migration from the country to the city has posed real challenges. A central issue is that leaving the rural
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areas
to
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urban
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areas
has presented severe environmental threats in
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cities
.
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A large number of
city dwellers leads to increasing demand for water, energy,
as well
as more pollutant output, which can contaminate the environment in these
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areas
.
In addition
, the decrease in
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living
quality in
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urban
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areas
is another direct result of
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phenomenons.
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housing
, sewage and health care in a city have their
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own
limitations, if the number of city inhabitants exceeds that limit, there will be someone who cannot have these basic
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living
needs.

Serious attempts
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must
be made
to remedy the situation. An effective solution to deal with the
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living
standard problem would be to
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improve
the
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living
conditions in both the city and the countryside. More
specifically
, the
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government
should
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improve
the health care system, sewage system and boost the supply of affordable accommodation in
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urban
and rural
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areas
,
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so
that
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people
don’t need to migrate to the city to
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make
both their
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and others
’
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living
quality go down.
Furthermore
, a possible way to eliminate environmental threats on large
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urban
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centres
is to promote
ecologically
responsible
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behaviour
.
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Cities
dwellers should
be encouraged
to
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use
public transport, eco-friendly vehicles
instead
,
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reduce
their energy
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use
and their waste output, pollution level can
be brought
down.

In conclusion
, leaving bucolics to
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live
in
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urban
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areas
can cause environmental issues and a lower
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living
standard. If
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people
can
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join
hands to
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help
, these
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bad
effects will no longer be the problem.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay These days it seems that an increasing number of people are leaving rural areas to live in the city. Discuss some of the effects of rural depopulation (migration from the country to the city) and suggest some ways in which this trend would be reversed. v. 1

Essay
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298 words
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