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Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree What is your opinion v.1

Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree What is your opinion v. 1
Some of the people believe that friends with exactly the same opinions on different topics are better than the ones that can argue with them. On the one hand, having similar interests on hobbies is a reason to start a friendship. In this case people always have something to discuss. If your friend has the same view of a particular problem as you do, he can help you to find a solution faster. Such friend will always support you and take your side in any argument. He will be there for you in any situation. On the other hand, having equal opinions with your friend is sometimes boring. You always agree on every issue with each other and have no discussion or argument. If your friend disagrees with you, you can discuss both views, reach a compromise and come up with a suitable solution. But strong disagreement can often lead to a heated argument or even ruin your friendship. In my opinion, friends should not agree on everything they are talking about. I think that this kind of friendship is boring and it is not likely to last for long. However, a friend with the same opinion as yours will definitely support your point of view in any discussion. And it is a wonderful thing, too. In conclusion, I would like to say that it is good to have different views on some topics or problems, but you should be loyal to the opinion of your friend. Everyone should appreciate their friendship and should not let stupid arguments ruin it.
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people
always have something to discuss. If your
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friend
has the same
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of a particular problem as you do, he can
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help you to find
a solution faster. Such
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friend
will always support you and take your side in any
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. He will be there for you in any situation.

On the other hand
, having equal
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opinions
with your
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is
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boring. You always
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agree
on every issue with each other and have no discussion or
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argument
. If your
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friend
disagrees with you, you can discuss both
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views
, reach a compromise and
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come
up with a suitable solution.
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strong disagreement can
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or even ruin your friendship.

In my
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that this kind of friendship is boring and it is not likely to last for long.
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friend
with the same
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opinion
as yours will definitely support your point of
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view
in any discussion. And it is a wonderful thing, too.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that it is
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you should be loyal to the
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of your
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friend
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IELTS essay Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree What is your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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