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Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solve poverty but some other people argue that industrial growth is creating environmental problems and it should be stopped Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solve poverty but some other people argue that industrial growth is creating environmental problems and it should be stopped 2
Prosperity is very difficult to define, because it means so many different things to different people. While some people link peace of mind to wealth and material success, others think it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships. Yet others think that spiritual paths, rather than either the material world or relationships with people, are the only way to true prosperity. Because people interpret prosperity for themselves in so many different ways, it is difficult to give any definition that is true for everyone. However, if there are different kinds of peace of mind for different individuals, then the first step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge. A person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy. Of course, factors such as loving relationships, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our contentment too. But this does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy. Overall, I think an ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving enjoyment. By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our relationships, making other people happy, etc. ) And what is not (a problem at work, getting annoyed about trivial things, etc. ) Like self-awareness, this is also very difficult to achieve, but I think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving happiness.
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perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving enjoyment. By that I mean an ability to have a
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sense of what is
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in our
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happy, etc.
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IELTS essay Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solve poverty but some other people argue that industrial growth is creating environmental problems and it should be stopped 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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