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Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and TV is passive and does not require a person to use their imaginations. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and TV is passive and does not require a person to use their imaginations. v. 1
Some people believe that reading books is one way of maintaining an agile mind, something that movies and TV set can't do so as they are passive. However, in my opinion, I agree that reading books helps in keeping the mind active, but disagree that watching films and television does not require imagination. To begin with, when we read a book we have to create images in our mind. Moreover, reading requires some preparation as well. Readers have to firstly choose the book, buy it and then spend an hour and hours to read it. Imagination is the key aspect of the reading because the writer only describes the situation and characters in words and reader has to imagine every scene in the mind. For example, a recent survey by Texas University found that 70% of the people who read the same book are likely to describe the characters differently. This shows that imagination plays a vital role while reading a book. On the other hand, watching films and television is also an important method of learning. Nowadays, stories from the books are later on being made into movies to nourish the minds of the people and also helps in broadening the horizons of imagination. For instance, the story of Harry Potter was picturised afterwards and it is thought that as you watch movies and television programs you tend to imagine and believe in your capabilities. Additionally, films bring more colours to the minds. To exemplify, a lot of educational institutes offer smart classes to their students to make their learning more interactive. In conclusion, although reading books keep the mind active, films and television are also crucial for widening the imagination. Thus, both plays a pivotal role in enhancing the knowledge and developing critical thinking.
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is one way of maintaining an agile
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, something that movies and TV set can't do
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as they are passive.
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helps
in keeping the
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active,
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disagree that watching films and
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television
does not require imagination.

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we
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create images in our
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,
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requires
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preparation
as well
. Readers
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firstly
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,
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it and then spend an hour and hours to read it.
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is the key aspect of the
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reading
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because
the writer
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describes
the situation and characters in words and reader
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has to
imagine every scene in the
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mind
.
For example
, a recent survey by Texas University found that 70% of the
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people
who read the same
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book
are likely to
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describe
the characters
differently
. This
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that
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plays a vital role while
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a book.

On the other hand
, watching films and
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television
is
also
an
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important
method of learning. Nowadays, stories from the
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books
are later on
being made
into movies to nourish the
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minds
of the
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people
and
also
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helps
in broadening the horizons of
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imagination
.
For instance
, the story of Harry Potter was
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picturised
afterwards and it is
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thought
that as you
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watch
movies and
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television
programs you tend to imagine and believe in your capabilities.
Additionally
, films bring more
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colours
to the
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minds
. To exemplify,
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a lot of
educational institutes offer smart classes to their students to
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make
their learning more interactive.

In conclusion
, although
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books
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keep
the
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mind
active, films and
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television
are
also
crucial for widening the
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imagination
.
Thus
, both plays a pivotal role in enhancing the knowledge and developing critical thinking.
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IELTS essay Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and TV is passive and does not require a person to use their imaginations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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