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Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any rel v.1

Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination with this statement 1
Many people believe that artificial brilliance will replace all jobs gradually in the future. While it is a well-known evidence that the majority of jobs are done by artificial intelligence and computer sciences, few jobs, especially jobs which are required human relationships and conscience, cannot do with robots. This essay will discuss why particular jobs are done by human in the future despite the development of artificial perception. Robots can replace human work, labour on a great number of jobs which do not require human labour like some manual works. Many companies prefer to use artificial agility on their jobs instead of employees because of the case that artificial subtlety requires less money than workers and they do not need some educational programs. For instance, in Turkey, some municipalities have tried that they have picked automatic machines to give a ticket instead of workers in subways because of the law that they do not want to pay extra salaries in order to purchase the ticket of subways. That's why, the majority of people believe that robots can replace human in the decades. On the other hand, particular jobs will continue to be made by people. Some jobs require human perspective to be done completely due to the fact that artificial sense has rational ideas and it works like mathematical. However, sometimes we should figure out the beyond of the visible within our consciousness. A lawyer, for example, should have conscious to advocate one person correctly. If robots replaced lawyers, they would not defend one person correctly because they cannot make a decision who person is an innocent or guilty. Therefore, I support that artificial skill cannot replace all of vocations. In conclusıon, artificial acumen is perceived as a threat by most people due to the matter that they think that it will be a new employee instead of human. Some jobs which are required basic skills will be done entirely by robots; however, specific jobs will always exist and they will be done by their experts. Ultimately, a lot of human jobs will be safe in an increasingly artificial intelligent workforce.
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all
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jobs
gradually
in the future. While it is a well-known evidence that the majority of
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jobs
are done
by artificial intelligence and computer sciences, few
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jobs
,
especially
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jobs
which
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human
relationships and conscience, cannot do with robots. This essay will discuss why particular
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jobs
are done
by
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human
in the future despite the development of artificial perception.

Robots can
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human
work,
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labour
on a great number of
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jobs
which do not require
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human
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labour
like
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some
manual works.
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companies
prefer to
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use
artificial agility on their
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jobs
instead
of employees
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because
of the case that artificial subtlety requires less money than
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workers and
they do not need
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some
educational programs.
For instance
, in Turkey,
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some
municipalities have tried that they have picked automatic machines to give a ticket
instead
of workers in subways
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because
of the law that they do not want to pay extra salaries in order to
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purchase
the ticket of subways. That's why, the majority of
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people
believe that robots can
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replace
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human
in the decades.

On the other hand
, particular
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jobs
will continue to
be made
by
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people
.
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jobs
require
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perspective to
be done
completely due to the fact that artificial sense has rational
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ideas
and it works like mathematical.
However
,
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sometimes
we should figure out the beyond of the visible within our consciousness. A lawyer,
for example
, should have conscious to advocate one person
correctly
. If robots replaced lawyers, they would not defend one person
correctly
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because
they cannot
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make
a decision
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who person
is an innocent or guilty.
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, I support that artificial
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skill
cannot
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all of vocations
.

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conclusıon
, artificial acumen
is perceived
as a threat by most
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people
due to the matter that they
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think
that it will be a new employee
instead
of
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human
.
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jobs
which
are required
basic
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skills
will
be done
entirely
by robots;
however
, specific
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jobs
will always
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exist and
they will
be done
by their experts.
Ultimately
,
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a lot of
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human
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jobs
will be safe in an
increasingly
artificial intelligent workforce.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination with this statement 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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