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Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any rel v.2

Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination with this statement 2
Book reading is considered as health mental activity and a good habit, whereas watching movies, dramas, shows and television is considered as scripted and involves no use of person' s creativity. In my opinion I strongly believe that reading books contribute to not only enhancing thought process but greatly helps in expanding knowledge about various topics. First of all, people who have a habit of reading books are mentally very active. They have a solid thinking process and have ability to think out of the box. Secondly, they have an excellent observation and creative thinking process. For example, majority of CEO' s and world leaders read between 25-50 books each year. They consider book reading as a food for mind, body and soul. Personally, I started book reading at the age of 20 and have noticed substantial transformation in my personality and thinking process. Another example is, Elon Musk, In an interview with BBC he explained how book reading always helped in growing his imagination and creative skills and that' s when he came up with an idea of Paypal, Tesla and SpaceX. On the contrary, people spend majority of time watching television, talk shows, dramas and movies lack such traits. I am convinced that content shown on television or movies is quiet engaging but impacts negatively on young minds. For example, over the last 15 years new researches in different subjects have declined significantly owning to watching online or television content. To recapitulate it, I strongly advocate that book reading is an excellent habit and helps person stay mentally active, confident, creative and knowledgeable.
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at the age of 20 and have noticed substantial transformation in my personality and thinking
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. Another example is, Elon Musk, In an interview with BBC he
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, talk
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, dramas and movies lack such traits. I
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that content shown on
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or movies is
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engaging
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impacts
negatively
on young minds.
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, over the last 15 years new researches in
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subjects have declined
significantly
owning to watching online or
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content.

To recapitulate it, I
strongly
advocate that
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book
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is an excellent habit and
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helps
person stay mentally active, confident, creative and knowledgeable.
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IELTS essay Reading books keeps a person s mind active whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination with this statement 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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