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Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. with this statement? v. 1
Entertainment can come in various forms such as books, movies, and TV series. Many book lovers tend to think that reading actively engages the mind, while arguing that watching television in the long run kills imagination. I partially agree with this point of view. It is difficult to deny that reading books is a more mentally stimulating activity than watching TV. A reader's brain is kept active by the act of imagining through which written words are turned into mental images. When reading, one can freely imagine whatever they please, for example, how certain characters and sceneries look like in a story. On the other hand, all the images are already presented to movie viewers, with sounds and special effects. In addition, books allow a reader to pause and reflect. Reflection helps to enhance the understanding of the author's ideas or stories as well as the reader's pleasure in immersing in their imagination. It is not possible to pause television and movies in the cinema. Unless one watches movies online, on Netflix for example, which allows one to pause, one is robbed of the opportunity to reflect in this relatively passive form of entertainment. Despite the benefits of books, it can be argued that a person can still exercise their imagination while watching films. Some people might try to imagine the ending of a movie or what the protagonist might do next. Therefore, movies do not necessarily kill imagination. In conclusion, although watching movies allows for some degree with imagination, it is not as mentally stimulating as reading books. If a person wants to keep their mind active during a film, they should try to imagine the plot or pause and reflect on the ideas and meanings of the story.
Entertainment can
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come
in various forms such as
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books
,
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movies
, and TV series.
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Many
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book
lovers tend to
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think
that
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reading
actively
engages the mind, while arguing that watching television in the long run kills
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imagination
. I
partially
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agree
with this point of view.

It is difficult to deny that
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reading
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books
is a more mentally stimulating activity than watching TV. A reader's brain is
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kept
active by the act of imagining through which written words
are turned
into mental images. When
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reading
, one can
freely
imagine whatever they
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please
,
for example
, how certain characters and sceneries look like in a story.
On the other hand
, all the images are already presented to
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movie
viewers, with sounds and special effects.

In addition
,
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books
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allow
a reader to
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pause
and reflect. Reflection
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helps
to enhance the understanding of the author's
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ideas
or stories
as well
as the reader's pleasure
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in immersing in
their
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imagination
. It is not possible to
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pause
television and
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movies
in the cinema. Unless one
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watches
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movies
online, on Netflix
for example
, which
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allows
one to
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pause
, one
is robbed
of the opportunity to reflect in this
relatively
passive form of entertainment.

Despite the benefits of
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books
, it can
be argued
that a person can
still
exercise their
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imagination
while watching films.
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Some
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people
might try to imagine the ending of a
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movie
or what the protagonist might do
next
.
Therefore
,
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movies
do not
necessarily
kill imagination.

In conclusion
, although watching
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movies
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allows
for
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some
degree with
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imagination
, it is not as mentally stimulating as
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reading
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books
. If a person wants to
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keep
their mind active during a film, they should try to imagine the plot or
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pause
and reflect on the
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ideas
and meanings of the story.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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