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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words v.7

International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 7
Nowadays, every person wants to travel in international countries for business purposes or just to visit the country. There is a widespread worry that It will only lead to a myriad, of concerns on everyone's life. While the negative impacts that accompany the growth in the travel sector are a problem, these certainly do not outweigh the associated benefits. However, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance and The most preponderant sole is that many people are going into international countries such as for searching jobs or for better education and some of them also went for a greater life. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only can particularly benefit more when it comes to being effective, but they can also enhance the productivity and quality of their lives with much ease and efficacy. In additionally, all these merits stand specific in good and excellence are concerned. On the other hand, another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned proposition is this implies that it is only likely to help one thrive and excel in varied can they broaden their horizons, thus learning such essential attributes as responsibility and dedication. Moreover, these pros have also brought bring the effects on the whole world because some people when move to another country then they mostly commenced to remain busy in education or work and, they don't have enough time to contact with family. Therefore, the population of birth land started to decrease. For instance, if everybody goes to settle in international countries, then definitely they attempt to sit there with their families and the population of birth place will drown. In conclusion, if the merits of international travel give use a lot of benefits of a bright future ahead and there are also cons of our country. I think, this benefit has also a drawback.
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for business purposes or
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just
to visit the
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country
. There is a widespread worry that It will
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lead to a myriad, of concerns on everyone's life. While the
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negative
impacts that accompany the growth in the travel sector are a problem, these
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many
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people
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international
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countries
such as for searching jobs or for better education and
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some
of them
also
went for a greater life. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not
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only
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particularly
benefit more when it
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to being effective,
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enhance the productivity and quality of their
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with much
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ease
and efficacy. In
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, all these merits stand specific in
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good
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.

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it is
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only
likely to
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help
one thrive and excel in varied can they broaden their horizons,
thus
learning such essential attributes as responsibility and dedication.
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, these pros have
also
brought bring the effects
on the whole
world
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because
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some
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people
when
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move
to another
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country
then they
mostly
commenced to remain busy in education or work and, they don't have
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enough
time to contact with family.
Therefore
, the population of birth land
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started
to decrease.
For instance
, if everybody goes to settle in
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international
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countries
, then definitely they attempt to sit there with their families and the population of birth place will drown.

In conclusion
, if the merits of
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international
travel give
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use
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a lot of
benefits of a bright future ahead and there are
also
cons of our
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country
. I
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, this benefit has
also
a drawback.
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IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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