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Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. with this statement? v. 3
Nowadays, researches have shown that brain activity peaks when someone reads a book and this is not surprising. While readers use their imagination and keep their brain activity, television audiences do not need to imagine any scene and hence their brain remains inactive. This essay, therefore, agrees with the given statement that reading makes the mind active because in an edition the author uses words to describe situations and readers imagine the complete context but television programs explicitly show what they want you to see. Firstly, when we read a volume, we have to create images in the mind. Process to read a publication also need some preparations, with the main essential is spending many hours reading the publication. Moreover, the situation and character in the opus also must be interpreted by readers to understand every scene in their mind. For instance, a survey conducted in university of Colorado shows that 85% of the readers have different imagination when they interpret the book. On the other hand, station audiences do not require to imagine the situation. Film and television programs have exact place, time and character, which limit the audience's horizon. Watching the programme only requires a person to sit in front of the screen without even thinking about the situations because they are already documented. For example, “The Fault in Our Stars” readers and audience have different insight whey they discuss about this creation. In conclusion, I personally agree that reading books can make people intellect more active, whereas watching films make the people quite passive because we need a lot of preparation to read books.
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reads
a book and this is not surprising. While readers
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use
their imagination and
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keep
their brain activity, television audiences do not need to imagine any scene and
hence
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,
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agrees
with the
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statement that reading
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makes
the mind active
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because
in an edition the author
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uses
words to
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describe
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situations
and readers imagine the complete context
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but
television programs
explicitly
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show
what they want you to
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see
.

Firstly
, when we
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read
a volume, we
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have to
create images in the mind. Process to
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read
a publication
also
need
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some
preparations, with the main essential is spending
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many
hours reading the publication.
Moreover
, the
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situation
and character in the opus
also
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must
be interpreted
by readers to understand every scene in their mind.
For instance
, a survey conducted in university of Colorado
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shows
that 85% of the readers have
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different
imagination when they interpret the book.

On the other hand
, station audiences do not require to imagine the
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situation
. Film and television programs have exact place, time and character, which limit the audience's horizon. Watching the
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programme
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only
requires a person to sit in front of the screen without even thinking about the
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situations
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because
they are already documented.
For example
, “The Fault in Our Stars” readers and audience have
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different
insight whey they
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discuss about this
creation.

In conclusion
, I
personally
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agree
that reading books can
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make
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people
intellect more active, whereas watching films
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make
the
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people
quite passive
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because
we need
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a lot of
preparation to
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read
books.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and television is passive and does not require a person to use their imagination. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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