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Question: What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v.1

Question: What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v. 1
In recent years, it is not difficult to distinguish by seeing the individuals' appearance, including culture and trait what they have. I believe that it is no denying that realizing one's temper and one's culture in wearing their clothes is obvious. To begin with, it is not impossible to recognize people's culture in the sense that what costumes people wearing on. In the first place, normally people can notice to see other people's outwear which wearing of the clothes of religion. For example, Buddhist people might wear Buddhists garment and also some people who wearing hijab, which covered from head to feet might have Islam religion. Furthermore, people can also predict the one's culture of nation by watching what kinds of style people wear. For instance, in Singapore, the citizens usually wearing tight T-shirt and short pants. So others countries' people are highly likely to know where they come from or what vogue clothes in fashions of that country they have these days. Another point worth mentioning is that people can be informed by wearing their fashion style to other people. As far as luxury brand clothes is concerned, a number of people can undoubtedly trust that wearing a fancy jacket and accessories is commonly inclined to show them off to other people. In addition, some people wearing training uniform frequently is also represented to other people to have idea that those people like to work out or they enjoy playing active activities. In conclusion, fashion substantially provides other people with their culture as well as character. So I would say that people consider the power of fashion and can give people to amounts of information.
In recent years, it is not difficult to distinguish by seeing the individuals' appearance, including
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culture
and trait what they have. I believe that it is no denying that realizing one's temper and one's
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culture
in wearing their
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clothes
is obvious.

To
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begin
with, it is not impossible to recognize
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people
's
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culture
in the sense that what costumes
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people
wearing on. In the
first
place,
normally
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people
can notice to
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see
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other
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people
's outwear which wearing of the
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clothes
of religion.
For example
, Buddhist
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people
might wear Buddhists garment and
also
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some
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people
who wearing hijab, which covered from head to feet might have Islam religion.
Furthermore
,
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people
can
also
predict the one's
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culture
of nation by watching what kinds of style
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people
wear.
For instance
, in Singapore, the citizens
usually
wearing tight T-shirt and short pants.
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So
others countries'
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people
are
highly
likely to know where they
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come
from or what vogue
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clothes
in
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fashions
of that country they have these days.

Another point worth mentioning is that
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people
can
be informed
by wearing their
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fashion
style to
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other
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people
. As far as luxury brand
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clothes
is concerned
, a number of
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people
can
undoubtedly
trust that wearing a fancy jacket and accessories is
commonly
inclined to
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show
them off to
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other
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people
.
In addition
,
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people
wearing training uniform
frequently
is
also
represented to
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other
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people
to have
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idea
that those
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people
like to work
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out or
they enjoy playing active activities.

In conclusion
,
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fashion
substantially
provides
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other
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people
with their
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culture
as well
as character.
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So
I would say that
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people
consider the power of
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fashion
and can give
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people
to amounts of information.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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