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Question: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support y v. 1

Some people reckon that the tourist needs to accept all social and environmental responsibility where they visit while others disagree with them. I believe tourists need to accept all these responsibilities. Some people think If someone visits any country, they need to accept the responsibility related to social and environmental. They believe even for some time they are part of that country, but they need to obey all the rules and regulations of the country. We can't allow them to violate any rules and regulations of the country. For instance, If someone visits the USA and while crossing roads he/she didn't obey the traffic rule, so they can't claim any leverage of tourists. If they do anything wrong, they need to be punished for that. On the other hand, Some people think we can't restrict the tourists to obey all the rules and regulations because they are our guests. They visit here to explore our country and we need to give them respect and can't force them to obey all rules and regulations until, if there act to harm someone. For example, if someone visits the northern area of Pakistan, we can't enforce them to wear specific dresses in that area, they are our guests we need to facilitate them so they left us with good memories. In conclusion, both have their own point of view, but every area or country has some rules and regulation and they are above either you are a guest or citizens of the country. They need to be obeyed in every circumstance. So tourists need to accept all these responsibilities, this will also help them in exploring the visiting country.

IELTS essay Question: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support y v.1

Some
people
reckon that the
tourist
needs
to
accept
all social and environmental responsibility where they
visit
while others disagree with them. I believe
tourists
need
to
accept
all these responsibilities.

Some
people
think
If
someone
visits
any
country
, they
need
to
accept
the responsibility related to social and environmental. They believe even for
some
time they are part of that
country
,
but
they
need
to
obey
all the
rules
and
regulations
of the
country
. We
can't
allow
them to violate any
rules
and
regulations
of the
country
.
For instance
, If
someone
visits
the USA and while crossing roads he/she didn't
obey
the traffic
rule
,
so
they
can't
claim any leverage of
tourists
. If they do anything
wrong
, they
need
to
be punished
for that.

On the other hand
,
Some
people
think
we
can't
restrict the
tourists
to
obey
all the
rules
and
regulations
because
they are our guests. They
visit
here to explore our
country and
we
need
to give them respect and
can't
force them to
obey
all
rules
and
regulations
until, if there act to harm
someone
.
For example
, if
someone
visits
the northern area of Pakistan, we
can't
enforce them to wear specific dresses in that area, they are our guests we
need
to facilitate them
so
they
left
us with
good
memories.

In conclusion
, both have their
own
point of view,
but
every area or
country
has
some
rules
and
regulation and
they are above either you are a guest or citizens of the
country
. They
need
to
be obeyed
in every circumstance.
So
tourists
need
to
accept
all these responsibilities, this will
also
help
them in exploring the visiting
country
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht
Essay
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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