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Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v.2

Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v. 2
Although some people believe giving presents is an important way to display the care for family and friends, while others have different opinions for showing care and love using alternate methods. In this essay, we are going to discuss both the views and will give my opinion towards the conclusion. Gifts are priceless, you can't associate money with the gift as it has emotions attached to it. Some people believe that giving expensive present is important than the usefulness of the gift for the recipient. It is highly important while choosing the item, you consider the need and quality of the product, that can bring some change in the person's life and give them the way to remember you because of the gift. For Example, choosing an expensive watch than a smart watch or health band. Although it is also a good way to show that you care and depict the importance of them in your life. There are many other ways as well to show you care and love, such as, spending quality time with the family members, helping the friend in need which could be as simple as guidance on particular subjects. For example, you might spend a lot of time in your business, work or studies and your friend and family members are looking for some ways to talk and enjoy with you. I believe it is more important to spend quality time with family and friends, providing help and support wherever required is more important than giving presents. In today's fast paced environment, it is more critical to spend time than providing the gifts to show you love. In conclusion, it depends on person to person, whether to give gifts or show affection in other important ways. But people tend to remember you more if you spend time and help them in need.
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believe giving presents is an
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way
to display the
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, while others have
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different
opinions for showing
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care
and
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love
using alternate methods. In this essay, we are going to discuss both the views and will give my opinion towards the conclusion.

Gifts are priceless, you can't associate money with the
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gift
as it has emotions attached to it.
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Some
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people
believe that giving expensive present is
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important
than the usefulness of the
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gift
for the recipient. It is
highly
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important
while choosing the item, you consider the need and quality of the product, that can bring
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some
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change
in the person's life and give them the
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way
to remember you
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because
of the
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gift
.
For Example
, choosing an expensive
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watch
than a smart
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watch
or health band. Although it is
also
a
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good
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way
to
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show
that you
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care
and depict the importance of them in your life.

There are
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other
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as well
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show
you
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care
and
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love
, such as, spending quality
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time
with the
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family
members, helping the
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friend
in need which could be as simple as guidance on particular subjects.
For example
, you might
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spend
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a lot of
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time
in your business, work or studies and your
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friend
and
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family
members are looking for
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some
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ways
to talk and enjoy with you.

I believe it is more
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important
to
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spend
quality
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with
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family
and
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friends
, providing
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help
and support wherever required is more
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important
than giving presents. In
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today
's
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fast
paced environment, it is more critical to
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spend
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time
than providing the
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gifts
to
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show
you
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love
.

In conclusion
, it depends on person to person, whether to give
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gifts
or
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show
affection in other
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important
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ways
.
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But
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people
tend to remember you more if you
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spend
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time
and
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help
them in need.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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