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Question: Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Question: Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 1
The taxpaying system has evolved over the years and emerged as the niche for the development of every country. It is argued by many that their hard-earned income should be used for themselves only and income's share should not be paid to the government as tax. In my opinion, taxes should always be mandatory, as they are used by the government for the welfare of a country, and aim at maintaining a balance between the rich and poor section of society. Firstly, every earning citizen of a country must pay back to its society, out of gratitude towards the country for enabling them to earn a living. To illustrate, it is due to security, safety, and privileges provided by a country that a person is able to fulfill their dreams and pursue a career. Furthermore, money collected by taxes is used by the government in public development sectors such as developing roads, parks, hospitals, and schools. Besides this, they are also used for providing alms and shelter for poor grief-stricken people. Finally, because of fear of heavy taxes, people are encouraged to do long term savings for their future, as government offers some concession on taxes if proof of savings is submitted at the time of filing income tax. For instance, many people invest in mutual funds or open tax-saving fixed deposit accounts in the lure of saving taxes. Moreover, if people stop paying taxes and keep on utilizing the complete salary, then this will create a huge imbalance between the rich and the poor, eventually soaring the unemployment and the crime. To conclude, the monetary mechanism of earning and paying taxes is a way to ensure the proper functioning of a country, and should not be overturned.
The taxpaying system has evolved over the years and emerged as the niche for the development of every
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country
. It
is argued
by
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many
that their
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hard
-earned income should be
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used
for themselves
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only
and income's share should not
be paid
to the
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government
as
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tax
. In my opinion,
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taxes
should always be mandatory, as they are
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used
by the
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government
for the welfare of a
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country
, and aim at maintaining a balance between the rich and poor section of society.

Firstly
, every earning citizen of a
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country
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must
pay back to its society, out of gratitude towards the
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country
for enabling them to earn a living. To illustrate, it is due to security, safety, and privileges provided by a
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country
that a person is able to fulfill their dreams and pursue a career.
Furthermore
, money collected by
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taxes
is
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used
by the
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government
in public development sectors such as developing roads, parks, hospitals, and schools.
Besides
this, they are
also
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used
for providing alms and shelter for poor grief-stricken
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people
.

Finally
,
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because
of fear of heavy
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taxes
,
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people
are encouraged
to do long term savings for their future, as
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government
offers
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some
concession on
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taxes
if proof of savings
is submitted
at the time of filing income
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tax
.
For instance
,
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many
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people
invest in mutual funds or open tax-saving
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fixed
deposit accounts in the lure of saving
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taxes
.
Moreover
, if
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people
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stop
paying
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taxes
and
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keep
on utilizing the complete salary, then this will create a huge imbalance between the rich and the poor,
eventually
soaring the unemployment and the crime.

To conclude
, the monetary mechanism of earning and paying
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taxes
is a way to ensure the proper functioning of a
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country
, and should not
be overturned
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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