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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. v. 5
Today, there are different concerns in human life. One of them is about the influence of teachers on children’s intelligence and social development. Some people believe that for school children, teachers have more inspiration than their parents. In my view, I partly agree with the view given. My essay will explain some main reasons for the idea given. On the one hand, there are some important reasons against the idea that teachers have more impact on childrean than their parents. One main argument would be that parents normally know their kids better than anyone else so they can choose a suitable envinronment for children to develop their intelligence and socializing skills. For instance, if parents see that their child has a natural talent for painting, they can send their children to gifted schools instead of other schools. Another argument is that parents are those who supply a child with their first oppotunities to develop a relationship, communicate and interact with their friends. This also affects influence and social development of children. On the other hand, there are some main reasons why the teachers may have more influence on the intelligence of their pupils is supported. Firstly, teachers are formally trained to help children develop their intelligence using a modern approach. Therefore, children can acquire knowledge and develop soft skills through social activities. For example, children can a work in groups to develop teamwork, collaboration skills and especially problem-solving skills. Secondly, a school is far better than a home when social encounters are considered. Going to school, children have chances to interact with their teachers, their friends and others people, thereby easilly building up and expanding their social relationships. A school is like a small society. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above – knowledge, skills and social encounters, it is certain that parents cannot be compared with school teachers when it comes to the development of children’s smartness and social relationship.
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teachers
on
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children’s
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intelligence
and
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social
development.
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people
believe that for
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school
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children
,
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teachers
have more inspiration than their
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parents
. In my view, I partly
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agree
with the view
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given
. My essay will
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explain
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some
main
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reasons
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idea
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given
.

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some
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important
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reasons
against the
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idea
that
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teachers
have more impact on
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childrean
than their
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parents
. One main argument would be that
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parents
normally
know their kids better than anyone else
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so
they can choose a suitable
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envinronment
for
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children
to
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develop
their
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intelligence
and socializing
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skills
.
For instance
, if
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parents
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see
that their child has a natural talent for painting, they can
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send
their
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children
to gifted
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schools
instead
of other
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schools
. Another argument is that
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parents
are those who supply a child with their
first
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oppotunities
to
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develop
a relationship, communicate and interact with their friends. This
also
affects influence and
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social
development of children.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
main
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reasons
why the
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teachers
may have more influence on the
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intelligence
of their pupils
is supported
.
Firstly
,
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teachers
are
formally
trained to
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help
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children
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develop
their
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intelligence
using a modern approach.
Therefore
,
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children
can acquire knowledge and
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develop
soft
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skills
through
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social
activities.
For example
,
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children
can a work in groups to
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develop
teamwork, collaboration
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skills
and
especially
problem-solving
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skills
.
Secondly
, a
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school
is far better than a home when
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social
encounters
are considered
. Going to
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school
,
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children
have chances to interact with their
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teachers
, their friends
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and others
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people
, thereby
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easilly
building up and expanding their
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social
relationships. A
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school
is like a
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small
society.

In conclusion
, for the
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reasons
mentioned above
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–
knowledge,
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skills
and
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social
encounters, it is certain that
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parents
cannot
be compared
with
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school
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teachers
when it
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comes
to the development of
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children’s
smartness and
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social
relationship.
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IELTS essay For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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