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Question: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Task-To what extent do u agree or disagree? v.1

Question: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Task- v. 1
Nowadays, many individuals are of the view that we have a lot choices. I completely agree with them because we now live in an era where technology has provided us with many alternatives, and also because we have the ability to do so freely. The first reason why I admit that the various options that we can choose from these days, have become plenty is that, it is hard to resist the various options technology throws at us in various sectors. For instance, in the transportation industry, the choices were limited to camels and donkeys in the old day, but in recent years we are able to choose from either bicycles, cars, ships, aeroplanes or fast moving trains. It is therefore, clear that we are now indeed faced with a plethora of choices. Another reason why we can make different numerous decisions on our own is that it is within our right to do so. Humans, as part of their God-given privilege can decide to freely choose anything they want without any problem. For example, my next door neighbour got married to his fifth wife last week, his response, when asked why, was that he can make use of his freedom of choice as he pleases. Hence, we can conclude that, we are justified to take any choice that makes us happy as human beings. In conclusion, this essay agrees that we, indeed, have a variety of options in this time and age due to the advent of technology and because we have the freedom to choose freely.
Nowadays,
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many
individuals are of the view that we have a lot
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choices
. I completely
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agree
with them
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because
we
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now
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live
in an era where technology has provided us with
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many
alternatives, and
also
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because
we have the ability to do
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so
freely
.

The
first
reason why I admit that the various options that we can
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choose
from these days, have become
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plenty
is that, it is
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hard
to resist the various
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options
technology throws at us in various sectors.
For instance
, in the transportation industry, the
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choices
were limited
to camels and donkeys in the
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old
day,
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but
in recent years we are able to
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choose
from either bicycles, cars, ships,
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aeroplanes
or
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fast
moving trains. It is
therefore
,
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clear
that we are
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now
indeed
faced with a plethora of choices.

Another reason why we can
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make
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different
numerous decisions on our
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own
is that it is within our right to do
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so
. Humans, as part of their God-
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given
privilege can decide to
freely
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choose
anything they want without any problem.
For example
, my
next
door
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neighbour
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got
married to his fifth wife last week, his response, when asked why, was that he can
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make
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use
of his freedom of
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choice
as he
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pleases
.
Hence
, we can conclude that, we
are justified
to take any
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choice
that
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makes
us happy as human beings.

In conclusion
, this essay
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agrees
that we,
indeed
, have a variety of options in this time and age due to the advent of technology and
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because
we have the freedom to
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choose
freely
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Task- v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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