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Due to the rapid development and expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you a v.4

Due to the rapid development and expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. 4
Supermarkets are gaining popularity in many countries. Some people argue that small local businesses are finding it extremely difficult to survive in the midst of swift growth and development of supermarkets and that the local communities would die out as the local businesses shut. I completely disagree with this argument and will try to explain in this essay why so. The reasons for supermarkets becoming popular are manifold. Firstly, they give a single platform to customers where they can buy everything they need ranging from groceries to clothing and more. Consequently, they do not have to make multiple stops at different stores to get the needful, hence, making shopping extraordinarily convenient. Secondly, they offer a number of facilities including car park, toilets, deli counters, resting areas to make shopping a more comfortable and fun experience. Thus, pulling more and more customers and multiplying the business. As more people opt to shop at supermarkets, local business' s suffer loss and eventually shut down. However, that, in no way, result in local communities' death. Today' s customers are resourceful and educated. They have the means of transportation and time to go to supermarkets as shopping has transformed into an entertainment. Convenience stores, however, still have a chance to survive by relocating to area where there is enough clientage. All in all, local communities can travel to supermarkets just fine and can easily survive in the absence of local convenience stores. In conclusion, supermarkets have given local businesses a tough time. In my opinion, local stores can move to carry on and even if they do not, local communities will survive by shopping at supermarkets because they are capable of doing so.
Supermarkets are gaining popularity in
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many
countries.
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people
argue that
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small
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local
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businesses
are finding it
extremely
difficult to
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survive
in the midst of swift growth and development of supermarkets and that the
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local
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communities
would
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die
out as the
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local
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businesses
shut. I completely disagree with this argument and will try to
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explain
in this essay why
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so
.

The reasons for supermarkets becoming popular are manifold.
Firstly
, they give a single platform to customers where they can
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buy
everything they need ranging from groceries to clothing and more.
Consequently
, they do not
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have to
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make
multiple
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stops
at
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different
stores to
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get
the needful,
hence
, making
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shopping
extraordinarily
convenient.
Secondly
, they offer a number of facilities including car park, toilets, deli counters, resting areas to
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make
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shopping
a more comfortable and fun experience.
Thus
, pulling more and more customers and multiplying the business.

As more
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people
opt to shop at supermarkets,
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local
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business&
#039; s suffer loss and
eventually
shut down.
However
, that, in no way, result in
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local
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communities&
#039; death.
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Today&
#039; s customers are resourceful and educated. They have the means of transportation and time to go to supermarkets as
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shopping
has transformed into an entertainment. Convenience stores,
however
,
still
have a chance to
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survive
by relocating to area where there is
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enough
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clientage
. All in all,
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local
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communities
can travel to supermarkets
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just
fine and can
easily
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survive
in the absence of
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local
convenience stores.

In conclusion
, supermarkets have
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given
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local
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businesses
a tough time. In my opinion,
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local
stores can
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move
to carry on and even if they do not,
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local
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communities
will
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survive
by
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shopping
at supermarkets
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because
they are capable of doing
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so
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Due to the rapid development and expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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