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Question: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v.2

Question: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 2
Transportation is the most important part of our day. Without transportation we cannot get to our workplace and be productive. Governments are responsible to invest money to improve roads and public transportation. But, it has always been a matter of debate that where they should spend more money? Even though some believe that improving roads is crucial, some disagree. In my view, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation for two key reasons. First, public transportation protects the environment. These days every family owns an average of three cars in Texas. Cars produce a toxic gas as a result of combustion. So, more cars can cause more air polution. For instance, I remember when I was five years old, my parents took me to Seoul, South Korea. Seoul has an astonishing public transportation. The air was so clean and it was easier to breathe compared to the city I used to live, Tabriz, Iran. In Tabriz, public transportation system is very poor. Every one drives his/hers personal vehicle to work. So, all of the schools get closed several times a year because of heavy air polution. Second, good public transportation decreases traffic. Sitting in traffic not only wastes our precious time that could have been spent with our family, but it also does increase the rate of accidents. More collisions increases traffic load and worsen the traffic problem. For example, where I currently live, Dallas, TX, the public transportation is terrible. The government of Texas spends more money on making more TexPress roads-TexPress roads are tollways that are convenient to take, but they are so expensive. As the time goes by, more people take tollways. The result is not pleasant at all because these days we witness traffic in tollways as well. And, accidents in those roads are even worse because they allow drivers to driver with higher speed. As you can see making more roads did not solve the traffic issue. If Texas government had spent more money on developing public transportation such as subways we did not have to deal with traffic on daily basis. In conclusion, improving public transportation should be a number one priority for every government. The air polution and traffic can be managed easier with public transportation. We should all work together to draw the governments' attention toward investing more money in our public transportation.
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transportation we
cannot
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get
to our workplace and be productive.
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Governments
are responsible to invest
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money
to
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improve
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roads
and
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public
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transportation
.
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money
?
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some
believe that improving
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roads
is crucial,
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some
disagree. In my view,
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governments
should spend more
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money
on improving
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public
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transportation
for two key reasons.

First
,
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public
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protects the environment. These days every family
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an average of three cars in Texas. Cars produce a toxic gas
as a result
of combustion.
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.
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, my parents took me to Seoul, South Korea. Seoul has an astonishing
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public
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transportation
. The
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air
was
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clean and it was easier to breathe compared to the city I
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to
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, Tabriz, Iran. In Tabriz,
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public
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transportation
system is
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poor. Every one drives his/hers personal vehicle to work.
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schools
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closed several times a year
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polution
.

Second,
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public
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decreases
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. Sitting in
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not
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wastes our precious time that could have
been spent
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load and worsen the
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problem.
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, where I
currently
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, Dallas, TX, the
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transportation
is terrible. The
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government
of Texas spends more
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on making more
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roads-TexPress
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are tollways that are convenient to take,
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they are
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expensive. As the time goes by, more
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take tollways. The result is not pleasant at all
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these days we witness
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in tollways
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are even worse
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drivers to driver with higher speed.
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making more
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did not solve the
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issue. If Texas
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had spent more
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money
on developing
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public
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transportation
such as subways we did not
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traffic
on daily basis.

In conclusion
, improving
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public
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transportation
should be a number one priority for every
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government
. The
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air
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polution
and
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traffic
can
be managed
easier with
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. We should all work together to draw the
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53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Question: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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