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Question: Lectures were used as a main method of teaching for the greater number of students in the past. With the existing technology, there is no longer any justification for that method. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Question: Lectures were used as a main method of teaching for the greater number of students in the past. With the existing technology, there is no longer any justification for that method. v. 2
With the advent of technology, there seems to be a shift in the method of teaching from the traditional classroom teacher to technologically inclined form of learning. While technological advances may have greatly improve learning, I do not agree that the conventional type of lecturing is no longer needed. Firstly, with the aid of a class teacher, students level of assimilation is increased. In other words, face -to- face teaching gives the learners an avenue to understand what was taught by interacting with the lecturer, getting clarifications on difficult topics and even asking questions at the end of each lecture. For example, many first class graduates are those who engaged their lecturer in class for more detailed explanations, as a result, their level of understanding is enhanced. Secondly, the role of a classroom tutor is vital in practical teachings. Students are guided by their teachers to have a hands-on experience which is very imperative for overall performance of the pupils. Medical students are good example. They are often time led by their teachers to have a first hand experience by putting them true on how to use the microscope to visualise organs of the body. Admittedly, advancement in technology may have improved learning method by providing students with a lot of information online by simply surfing the internet. However, Learners will still need a classroom instructor guidance for them to have proper understanding of the topic and also during practical classes. In conclusion, even though technological advances has tremendously enhanced method of learning by providing learners with information, I also believe that the importance of a classroom instructor should not be neglected as practically improve the learners.
With the advent of technology, there seems to be a shift in the method of teaching from the traditional classroom
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teacher
to
technologically
inclined form of
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learning
. While technological advances may have
greatly
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improve
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learning
, I do not
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agree
that the conventional type of lecturing is no longer needed.

Firstly
, with the aid of a
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class
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teacher
,
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students
level of assimilation
is increased
.
In other words
, face -to- face teaching gives the
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learners
an avenue to understand what
was taught
by interacting with the lecturer, getting clarifications on difficult topics and even asking questions at the
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end
of each lecture.
For example
,
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many
first
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class
graduates are those who engaged their lecturer in
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class
for more detailed explanations,
as a result
, their level of understanding
is enhanced
.

Secondly
, the role of a classroom tutor is vital in practical teachings.
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Students
are guided
by their
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teachers
to have a hands-on experience which is
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very
imperative for
overall
performance of the pupils. Medical
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students
are
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good
example. They are
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often
time led by their
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teachers
to have a
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first hand
experience by putting them true on how to
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use
the microscope to
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visualise
organs of the body.

Admittedly
, advancement in technology may have
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improved
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learning
method by providing
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students
with
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a lot of
information online by
simply
surfing the internet.
However
,
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Learners
will
still
need a classroom instructor guidance for them to have proper understanding of the topic and
also
during practical classes.

In conclusion
,
even though
technological advances has
tremendously
enhanced method of
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learning
by providing
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learners
with information, I
also
believe that the importance of a classroom instructor should not
be neglected
as
practically
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improve
the
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learners
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Lectures were used as a main method of teaching for the greater number of students in the past. With the existing technology, there is no longer any justification for that method. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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