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ReadingMany environmentalists support the current system of laws that works to save all species that may become extinct. They claim that the current variety of organisms that exist on Earth must be preserved. This idea has long been held as our moral and v.2

ReadingMany environmentalists support the current system of laws that works to save all species that may become extinct. They claim that the current variety of organisms that exist on Earth must be preserved. This idea has long been held as our moral and v. 2
The articles claims that safeguarding of endangered species is unnatural and poses many drawbacks and provides three reasons of support. The professor explains that the extinction should be prevented whenever it is possible. He states that loss of any species may have negative consequences and he refutes each of author' s reasons. First, the reading avers that the extinction cannot cause ecological disaster. The professor contends that the reading states that dinosaurs' extinction had no harm but it fails to explain that the extinction caused a dramatic shift on the Earth' s surface when there was no human on Earth. However, these days humans live on Earth and we are the people who wish to preserve the Earth so we must realize that each change can threat our existence. Second, the article posits that with advent of technology, there is no need to use nature as a source of inspiration for medications. The professor refutes the statement by saying that 40% of prescribed medicines are made of natural products, considering the small amount of these natural sources being studied. He explains that 100 species are estimated to be lost which means scientists lose the opportunity to make medicine from those species, forever. Third, the reading claims that the huge cost of saving species is not justified. The lecturer opposes this point by metioning that losing species has significant effect on the economy. He provides an example of fresh water muscle species which are in danger of distinction. He illustrates the point by saying that helping species to survive would keep the thriving industry and adds jobs to the society. He concludes that remaining species deserve to be saved if they have financial benefits.
The articles
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that safeguarding of endangered species is unnatural and poses
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many
drawbacks and provides three reasons of support. The professor
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explains
that the
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extinction
should be
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prevented
whenever it is possible. He states that loss of any species may have
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negative
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consequences and
he refutes each of
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First
, the reading avers that the
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extinction
cannot cause ecological disaster. The professor contends that the reading states that
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dinosaurs&
#039;
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extinction
had no harm
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but
it fails to
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explain
that the
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extinction
caused a dramatic shift on the
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Earth&
#039; s surface when there was no human on
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Earth
.
However
, these days humans
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live
on
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Earth and
we are the
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people
who wish to preserve the
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Earth
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so
we
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must
realize that each
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change
can threat our existence.

Second, the article posits that with advent of technology, there is no need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
nature as a source of inspiration for medications. The professor refutes the statement by saying that 40% of prescribed medicines
are made
of natural products, considering the
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small
amount of these natural sources
being studied
. He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explains
that 100 species
are estimated
to
be lost
which means scientists lose the opportunity to
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make
medicine from those species, forever.

Third, the reading claims that the huge cost of saving species is not justified. The lecturer opposes this point by
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metioning
that losing species has significant effect on the economy. He provides an example of fresh water muscle species which are in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of distinction. He illustrates the point by saying that helping species to survive would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the thriving industry and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
jobs to the society.
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He
concludes that remaining species deserve to
be saved
if they have financial benefits.
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IELTS essay ReadingMany environmentalists support the current system of laws that works to save all species that may become extinct. They claim that the current variety of organisms that exist on Earth must be preserved. This idea has long been held as our moral and v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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